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ppcat

花了半個多小時寫,感覺寫的不是很好,但又不知怎麼改....可否請各位提供您的寶貴意見呢

44. Some people like to travel with a companion. Other people prefer to travel alone. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.

When face the question: do you like to travel with friends or travel alone? Many people have different. Some people think that traveling with friends is an interesting thing that can bring us a lot of advantages, such as funny, safe, economic and so on. Other people, however, have negative viewpoint. As far as I am concerned, I strongly agree the statement that traveling with a companion can bring us many benefits and I will explore only a few of the most important ones here.

First of all, traveling with friends can bring us a lot of fun. Because of friends, we can share our feeling with each other during the travel. As the case of illustration, I often go traveling with my friend when I study in the university. During the trip, we not only play games, such as bridge, to cultivate our tacit agreement but also share our experiences, like the question which we encountered. Furthermore, we sometimes solve a problem when we travel. It is good for us to travel together.

Another reason why I want to travel with my friends is that traveling with more people is much saver than by oneself. When we travel to a place which we don’t familiar, we may face a lot of unpredicted problems. For example, if we travel to a wild place, we might lost our way. At that time, we may lost our head and make the problem get worse if we travel alone. However, if we travel with friends, we can discuss with each other can find a solution. As the proverb says “Two heads are better than one.”

Finally, we can save money, time, and energy when we travel with companions. For example, we can rent a car so that we can drive by turns to a far distance. We don’t have to not only worry about our energy will use up but also pay for extra money, like the tip for guide.

For the reasons mentioned above, traveling with a companion not only have a lot fun but also have many advantages, such as safe, economic etc.. It is safely to draw a conclusion that traveling with friends is better than traveling alone.

[此贴子已经被作者于2005-3-4 2:10:00编辑过]

whitesand

我下刀了, 别介意啊

When face the question: do you like to travel with friends or travel alone? Many people have different (answers). Some people think that traveling with friends is an interesting thing that can bring us a lot of advantages, such as funny, safe, economic (这里应该用名词形式: fun, safety, lower cost) and so on. Other people, however, have negative(different) viewpoint. As far as I am concerned, I strongly agree the statement that traveling with a companion can bring us many benefits and I will explore only a few of the most important ones here.

First of all, traveling with friends can bring us a lot of fun. Because of friends (With friends), we can share our feelings with each other during the travel. As the case of illustration, I often go(went) traveling with my friend when I study(studied) in the university. During the trip, we not only play(played) games, such as bridge, (which help) to cultivate our tacit agreement, but also shared our experiences, like the question which we encountered. Furthermore, we sometimes solved a problem when we travel. It is good for us to travel together. (这一段要注意时态的准确)

Another reason why I want to travel with my friends is that traveling with more people is much saver(是safer吧) than by oneself. When we travel to a place which we don’t familiar, we may face a lot of unpredicted problems. For example, if we travel to a wild place, we might lost our way. At that time, we may lost our head and make the problem get (去掉)worse if we travel alone. However, if we travel with friends, we can discuss with each other can(and) find a solution. As the proverb says “Two heads are better than one.”

Finally, we can save money, time, and energy when we travel with companions. For example, we can rent a car so that we can drive by turns to a far(long) distance. We don’t have to not only worry about our energy will use up(becoming exhausted) but also pay for extra money, like the tip for guide. (我觉得这里有好几点, 如果展开来分开说效果更好)

For the reasons mentioned above, traveling with a companion not only have a lot fun but also have many advantages, such as safe(safty), economic(这个词得改,需要换一个说法,本身的意思是经济学,如果是要说经济实惠,应该是economical 但是不是名词) etc.. It is safely to draw a conclusion that traveling with friends is better than traveling alone.

beautywawa

感謝白沙MM,,,,

pengstone

以下是引用whitesand在2005-3-3 17:10:00的发言：

我下刀了, 别介意啊

好怕怕，好“狠”的MM，呵呵。

ppcat

謝謝whitesand的指導....害你花了不少時間改吧

我現在才知道我還有好多地方需要加強...我會努力點的

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