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The small town and the big city both have some advantages to attract people to live in.Comparing the pros and cons,I choose to live big city,because living in big city benefits our life so much,especially in the below aspects.

First of all, big city provides the most convenient shopping environment, such as supermarkets, malls and some small markets besides our living buildings.This convenience improves our life a lot,and saves the time for us.Take myself for example,i like to eat fruit very much.Besides i have to have amount of the fruit everyday to keep my skin from drying, which seems a genetic disease in our family.Of course it is not a big trouble if we live in the big city, and we can choose whatever we want in the supermarket,changing the tastes day by day.But it is not the same result in the small town, there is less food in some seasons to supply with us.

In addition, we might as well enjoy more in the big city because there are a group of the entertainment activities,like the film,drama,concert and club.The resource of the recreation must be more than that in the small town, and updates frequently.In some way we can tell the contrast between small town and the big city is something like the black-white photo with the colorful photo.

However, there are a lot of people argue that the big city produces more pollution,which is harmful to our health.But we can not denied that the big city employs better and more hospitals than the small town.

All the reasons above tell us it is wise to choose living in the big city, and we can draw a more profound conclusion after we regard the 3 reasons as a whole organic matter,

[此贴子已经被作者于2005-2-15 17:24:34编辑过]

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以下是引用gzl840414在2005-2-15 16:38:00的发言：

The small town and the big city both have some advantages to attract people to live in.Comparing the pros and cons,I choose to live big city,because living in big city benefits our life so much,especially in the below aspects.

First of all, big city provides the most convenient shopping environment, such as supermarkets, malls and some small markets besides our living buildings.This convenience improves our life a lot,and saves the time for us.Take myself for example,i like to eat fruit very much.Besides i have to have amount of the fruit everyday to keep my skin from drying, which seems a genetic disease in our family.Of course it is not a big trouble if we live in the big city, and we can choose whatever we want in the supermarket,changing the tastes day by day.But it is not the same result in the small town, there is less food in some seasons to supply with us.

In addition, we might as well enjoy more in the big city because there are a group of the entertainment activities,like the film,drama,concert and club.The resource of the recreation must be more than that in the small town, and updates frequently.In some way we can tell the contrast between small town and the big city is something like the black-white photo with the colorful photo.

However, there are a lot of people argue that the big city produces more pollution,which is harmful to our health.But we can not denied that the big city employs better and more hospitals than the small town.

All the reasons above tell us it is wise to choose living in the big city, and we can draw a more profound conclusion after we regard the 3 reasons as a whole organic matter,

有不少重大语法错误。。。。

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以下是引用gzl840414在2005-2-15 16:38:00的发言：

The small town and the big city both have some advantages to attract people to live in.Comparing the pros and cons,I choose to live big city,because living in big city benefits our life so much,especially in the below aspects.

First of all,  big city cities  provides the most convenient shopping environment, such as supermarkets, malls and some small marketsconcient stores besides our living residentail buildings.This convenience improves our life a lot,and saves the time for us(建议：this convience saves a lot of time for us, and improves our life at the same time逻辑好点).Take myself for as an example,i like to eat fruits very much.Besides i have to have amount of the fruit fruits everyday to keep my skin from over drying, which seems a genetic disease in our my family.Of course it is not a big trouble if we live in the a big city, and we can choose whatever we want in the supermarket,changing the tastes everydayday by day.But it is not the same result However, things do not like that in thea small town, because there is less food in some seasons to supply with for us.

In addition, we might as well enjoy more in the big city because there are a group of the entertainment activities,like the film,drama,concert and club.The resource of the recreation must be more than that in the small town, and updates frequently.In some way we can tell the contrast between small town and the big city is something like the black-white photo with the colorful photo.

However, there are a lot of people argue that the big city produces more pollution,which is harmful to our health.But we can not denied that the big city employs better and more hospitals than the small town.

All the reasons above tell us it is wise to choose living in the big city, and we can draw a more profound conclusion after we regard the 3 reasons as a whole organic matter,

改了第二段，供参考。其余的，请自己也试着改一改，大家再一起讨论，提高很快的。建议注意句子之间的逻辑，冠词用法，单复数。

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