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132 If you could invent something new, what product would you develop?

To invent a useful machine that can guide people to be in a good mood, avoid the citizens from psychological problem, and keep every live in a happy life is my biggest wish. As what we have seen about our society, more and more people are confused by some mental diseases, which are severe or light. And then the happiness declines in our hearts. All these affect our life drastically. In this way, I want to make some machines can solve above problems.

              

First, we have to give a look at the tragedies in the university nowadays. The killing of the schoolmates happened at an increasing speed all over the world. People in the modern cities may be used to the suicide accidents from the actors to the younger. As there is so strong atmosphere that it wakes us to pay more attention to the psychological healthy. I think it is more important than any other factors that change everyone’s life in self-development. And all those demonstrate the undeniable emergency that we should take some actions about the people’s psychology health.

Besides, the uses of the machine that can cure our mental diseases meets the need of improve our value through the life. Suppose our life is limited, we can lead a more valuable life when we always are in a good mood, happy situation. There is the theory in the management science to prove that the workers will be more productive as well as they are satisfied with themselves. Just as the proverb says, “ the width of the life are changeable but not the length of the life”, I really hope the machine invented by me can give everyone a wider, more plentiful life.

Let’s bring our thought into a practical context. Someone may debate that we can adjust our feeling by ourselves, without the machine. But to be frank, our mental diseases usually undergo before we detective them, or when we ignore them. Look at the fact that we rely on the machine to measure whether our blood pressure is high or not, this machine is also needed if we want to know our psychological level is ok or not.

Thinking all over the approaches, you may be aware of the reason I want to invent the machine to keep person’s mental health. It is not only beneficial to our daily life, but also stabling and improving our society. Year after year, it has been the dream in my heart that impels me to learn more knowledge. But I am glad others can join me to do some contribution of the birth of this machine.

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To invent a useful machine that can guide people to be in a good mood, avoid the citizens from psychological problem, and keep every live in a happy life is my biggest wish【This sentence is not idomatic. The subject part is too long. 】. As what we have seen about our society, more and more people are confused by some mental diseases, which are severe or light. And then the happiness declines in our hearts. All these affect our life drastically. In this way, I want to make some machines can solve above problems.

First, we have to give a look at the tragedies in the university nowadays. The killing of the schoolmates happened at an increasing speed all over the world. People in the modern cities may be used to the suicide accidents from the actors to the younger. As there is so strong atmosphere that it wakes us to pay more attention to the psychological healthy. I think it is more important than any other factors that change everyone’s life in self-development. And all those demonstrate the undeniable emergency that we should take some actions about the people’s psychology health.

Besides, the uses of the machine that can cure our mental diseases meets the need of improve our value through the life. Suppose our life is limited, we can lead a more valuable life when we always are in a good mood, happy situation. There is the theory in the management science to prove that the workers will be more productive as well as they are satisfied with themselves. Just as the proverb says, “ the width of the life are changeable but not the length of the life”, I really hope the machine invented by me can give everyone a wider, more plentiful life.

Let’s 【I suggest that we do not use this "'s". It is not formal】bring our thought into a practical context. Someone may debate that we can adjust our feeling by ourselves, without the machine. But to be frank, our mental diseases usually undergo before we detective them, or when we ignore them. Look at the fact that we rely on the machine to measure whether our blood pressure is high or not, this machine is also needed if we want to know our psychological level is ok or not.

Thinking all over the approaches, you may be 【It seems that you change from WE into YOU. I do not recommend this usage. 】 aware of the reason I want to invent the machine to keep person’s mental health. It is not only beneficial to our daily life, but also stabling and improving our society. Year after year, it has been the dream in my heart that impels me to learn more knowledge. But I am glad others can join me to do some contribution of the birth of this machine.

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johnsonding

pretty nice. Just one sentence that I am not sure if it is a fragment: As what we have seen about our society, more and more people are confused by some mental diseases, which are severe or light.

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thanks for help, now threre is the correct sentences:

It  is my biggest wish to invent a useful machine that can guide people to be in a good mood, avoid the citizens from psychological problem, and keep every live in a happy life .

We are aware of the reason I want to invent the machine to keep person’s mental health.

Observing our society,  we can find more and more people are confused by various mental diseases, severe or slight.