北美托福作文题 菜鸟求拍砖 Parents can learn more from children

Claire99

平时作文写得很慢，语言也不够通畅，望各位牛牛指点一二！！！！感激不尽!!!!1

Parents can learn more from children than their children do more than them

There is a old saying that Parents are children’s best teachers in their whole life.They teach us walking, talking and singing,We learn every important “first-time” from them.However,With the advances of technologies and great development of society in past several decades,our generations are destined to experience more than our parents,youngsters may have more things deserved to learn for parents.

Obviously,we live in a society which is full of fiercer compete since we were born.When we were students,We competed to get a wonderful grade,We competed to a famous school;When we grew up, we competed to a good position,even a boy/girlfriend.In this environment, Adapting and facing the challenge become commonplace,we become a more adaptive person unconsciously than our parents expected .Although parents have taught us all they know about how to live well,sometimes it seems more workable to do all by ourselves than to listen their advice.The reason is that they want their children to realize their dream other than children’s without considering the reality situation. In China,It is commonly know that a father only teaches his son to study well but not to play basketball,just because he thinks that going to university has a brighter future than being a athlete,even his son love to be a basketball player.

Additionally,We accept new things more quickly than our parents. Nowadays, technologies has changed our life style,and No one could deny the fact that if you could not catch up the developing pace,you will be obsoleted by the society.Moreover,Educational experts pointed out that youngsters not only have more abundant resource but also have more potential to learn new things.With the tool of Television, Children can see more scenery than their parents,With the tool of internet, Children can both do homework and communicate with classmates.Take my case for example, i always show my parents how to use the Wechat and QQ,which make our connecting conveniently, they hardly imagine it has such wonderful functions.

Finally,I believe Every child is an angel.Sometimes you feel he/she be may be the one who is god ambassador to teaches adults some simply principle.In order to see children behaving decently and respectfully,every parents provide a clear explanation of what is good and what is bad,because they believe they have more experience about the world,life and society.Nevertheless, the more they experience, the more they lose——nature,which is most precious qualities in humans.Conversely,children like pure spring,always convey warm trust to everybody.

To sum up, what we have discussed above, we can safely draw the conclusion that parents can learn more from children today.Yet, when we are equal to be a teacher of parents, please remember that they are still our best life-guides whenever we need ,they play the most important role and have the greatest emotional investment in our education.

hellotoeve

有一些语言错误
youngsters may have more things deserved to learn for parents. -  deserve to  be learned
we competed to a good position,even a boy/girlfriend. - compete for a good position, appreciation from others,even a partner.
In this environment- under such circumstances
Adapting and facing the challenge become commonplace,we become a more adaptive person unconsciously than our parents expected  - are commonplace for us  become more adaptive     commonplace n/adj  become + adj
The reason is that they want their children to realize their dream other than children’s without considering the reality situation. 没看懂
等等太多了
第一段后面有点离题 第三段。。。

Claire99

hellotoeve 发表于 2014-12-7 23:25
有一些语言错误
youngsters may have more things deserved to learn for parents. -  deserve to  be lear ...

感谢批改！写得很中肯！这句话我的意思是很多家长想让孩子实现他们年轻时未完成的愿望而不考虑孩子自身的实际情况  The reason is that they want their children to realize their dream other than children’s without considering the reality situation