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po_po72

限时间写的 但是超过了：（    不过没有修改

4.5能拿到吗？   写的不好大家不要笑话我

还是要多鼓励俺  第一次写练习呢！！

015 Neighbors are the people who live near us. In your opinion, what are the qualities of a good neighbor? Use specific details and examples in your answer.

When you want to choose a place to live a long time, even for ever, what is the most important thing you consider? For me, people who live there is the most crucial thing. If you have a friendly, responsible and helpful neighbor, he or she can bring more comfortable life to you.

A friendly neighbor make you do not feel alone. For many students who go to oversea to study, they are impressed strongly, because their family is in their homeland. Everyday they need do every thing by themselves. But if they have a friendly neighbor, everything will become better. The neighbors can invite you to join their party, give you a big smile when you leave home to go to a school, share their experience about their life with you. They will make you funny as your relatives. If you have a neighbor like this, do you feel alone?

A helpful neighbor makes your life more convenient. I still remember the situation that I began to study English in America. I could not make heads or tails of it. My neighbor gave me a hand to help me. At that time, he resisted to talk with me two hours everyday, tech me ten of thousands of vocabularies and patiently tell me how get along with American people. I studied a lot of things from him. What a helpful man he is!

Apart from the above points, a real good neighbor must be a responsible guy. For this, I just want to tell you a true story. Last month, one day, I came back to home and was so tired that I slept on the sofa. Unfortunately, I forgot to close the door of my car. One thief wanted to steal my car. When he backed car to escape, he hit my mailbox. At this time, my neighbor found everything. He called policeman rapidly. As a result, my car was safe; the thief was arrested. I did not want to thank my god, my luck, because my neighbor did everything for me. So you can imagine how important to have a good neighbor.

In a word, a good neighbor must be a friendly, helpful and responsible person. But if you want to find a neighbor like this, you had better do this at first!

pengstone

以下是引用po_po72在2005-2-4 7:12:00的发言：

When you want to choose a place to live a long time, even for ever, what is the most important thing you consider? For me, people who live there is the most crucial thing. If you have a friendly, responsible and helpful neighbor, he or she can bring more comfortable life to you.

A friendly neighbor make you do not feel alone. For many students who go to oversea to study, they are impressed strongly (not clear what you mean), because their family is in their homeland. Everyday they need do every thing by themselves. But if they have a friendly neighbor, everything will become better. The neighbors can invite you (them)to join their party, give you (them)a big smile when you (they)leave home to go to a school, share their experience about their life with you. They will make you funny as your relatives. If you have a neighbor like this, do you feel alone?

it is not good to use "you".

A helpful neighbor makes your life more convenient. I still remember the situation that I began to study English in America. I could not make heads or tails of it. My neighbor gave me a hand to help me. At that time, he resisted (insisted?)to talk with me two hours everyday, tech me ten of thousands of vocabularies and patiently tell me how get along with American people. I studied a lot of things from him. What a helpful man he is!

Apart from the above points, a real good neighbor must be a responsible guy. For this, I just want to tell you a true story. Last month, one day, I came back to home and was so tired that I slept on the sofa. Unfortunately, I forgot to close the door of my car. One thief wanted to steal my car. When he backed car to escape, he hit my mailbox. At this time, my neighbor found everything. He called policeman rapidly. As a result, my car was safe; the thief was arrested. I did not want to thank my god, my luck, because my neighbor did everything for me. So you can imagine how important to have a good neighbor.

In a word, a good neighbor must be a friendly, helpful and responsible person. But if you want to find a neighbor like this, you had better do this at first!

   lease do not use "跪求" in your title, it sees a little intimidating.

po_po72

嘿嘿 没有那个意思   下次不这样了

谢谢帮忙看了看 我知道 原则上的错误不会有太多

因为就没用什么高深的词汇和句子  书到用时方恨少 啊

想写的东西真到要写的东西 才发现这个不知道 那个拼不出来

丢人呢