求小伙伴们改写！求拍！！！！万分感谢

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  Some parents argue that universities and colleges should not pay much attention to students' physical performance,since they reckon it has little relationships with success in the future.so the financial budget should prioritize classes and libraries.However,as an educational institution,academic performance is not the only deciding factor to be used in assessing the quality of a university.It is not surprised that some students who obtain excellent scores in their study might perform poorly on their working position.A successful person should develop himself academically as well as socially.(From the standpoint of success,high EQ is no less important than IQ)
  Under the drastically competitive environment,increasing students find they are going to face a more fierce society,whereas excellent grades in their major doesn't embody they can get a decent job down the road.Today,in addition to being good at studies,students are also required to be outstanding in other fields. Academic backgroud is not a single factor to succeed , whereas ,the ignored factor lies in their Emotional Quotient.How to manage relationships with the people around you? How to cooperate with your co-workers in a company? It is essential to learn and experience team spirit,which we can obtain from social activities and playing sports.By playing football on a team,for instance,students can make different types of friend and develop a sense of collaboration,which may be proved as an indispensable factor in building a career.
这是我写的第一篇，思路我参考了一下范文，感觉自己写的好吃力。。
我想要自己的作文水平再上一个档次，问问小伙伴们 是不是5段式的最好，1总，2正，3正，4反（这个反到底什么意思 怎么写？）5总  是不是这种结构最好啊？
求一些高分句型

Aside from fostering social skill and team spirit,doing sports is a good way to reduce pressure, enhance our physical condition,as well as improving efficiency of our study.You may hard to believe that doing some sports will reduce your anxiety and fatigue( weariness)after focusing highly on studies.Most people have a tendency to sit back and have a rest.Actually,the quickest and most plausible way to replenish your body is doing exercise. After profuse sweating,you will find youselve reborned. Accordingly,it is reasonable to attach importance to sports and social activities at the cost of some financial budget.
  
It goes without saying that academic standards is the heart of a university,and it can by no means be replaced by sports and social activities. What I suggest is Universities and colleges shoud surport the development of these activities as possible as they can.

From what I mentioned above,I would maintain that u and c should spend enough money on academic education as well as social movements to provide students with a best atmosphere to develop themselves。