【大四党最后一站作文28，感谢CDer】卡门的作文帖，求狠批！11.24大四党最后一战

psychoarya

carmensh 发表于 2013-11-15 16:36

你改的太好了！！谢谢！！

contrivance是我用错了，应该用equipment or machine之类
undue是不适当的，过度的 grip 紧张
我从新概念4上背下来的 LESSON46

carmensh

psychoarya 发表于 2013-11-15 23:14
你改的太好了！！谢谢！！

contrivance是我用错了，应该用equipment or machine之类

谢谢！学习啦@！

carmensh

11.14综合
The sea otter is a small sea mammal which play an important ecological role in the coastal ecosystem. Its population has been declining rapidly and experts realized that there were two possible explantions: environmental pollution or attacks by predators, among which they believe that the pollution hypothesis is more likely. However, the professor approve the other one by presenting three reasons.

Firstly, the professor claims that the pollution hypothesis is weakened and is not what the experts expect. Because if it is the chemical pollution that cause the deaths of sea otter, the body of sea otter will be washed up on shore, while the fact is that the dead see otter is hardly find by humans. Therefore, they are more likely to be eaten by predators.

Secondly, the professor points out that the pollution hypothesis fails to take other factors into consideration. Then the professor argues that because the human predators cause smaller whales, the food of the orca, disappear, so the orca have to change its diet and start predating other smaller sea mammals such as seals and sea lions.

Thirdly, the professor contends that the predation better explains the decline of sea otters due to the location accessible by sea otters, presenting the evidence that the sea otter is too large to enter shallow, rocky area where the sea otter has declined greatly.


这篇写挫了。。。第一遍的时候没看清是要比较两个假设谁可能性更大，与听力没明白啥意思，又重新看了一遍然后听了一遍才写的，但可能受第一次的影响，所以思路有点儿乱浪费了好多时间~~观点什么没有展开完全~~~

carmensh

11.15 TPO 11 综合
In the reading passage, the author hold a view that people nowadays are reading far less literature than they used to, and this trend has negative effects for the reading public, for culture in general, and for the future of literature itself. On the contrary, the professor contradicts this by presenting three reasons.

Firstly, the professor points out that the reading passage fails to take other factors into consideration, stating that not only the literature can provide the intellectual stimulation. The professor gives example that the historical and politic stories, though they are not literature,  are also of high quality and justified created, which could stimulate our imaginations just as literature does. Therefore, the author is clearly too absolute to draw the conclusion without ruling out other possibilities.

Secondly, the author contends that diverting time previouly spent in reading literature to trivial forms of entertainment has lowered the level of culture in general. While the professor opposes this opinion by arguing that literature is not the only form contributing to the culture in general, there are many other forms of culture besides literature. For example, seeing a good movie do not lower the cultural standard. Hence, the author obviously has drawn the conclusion on the basis of a false assumption.

Thirdly, the author may be right about the declining trend of literature, but a crucial fact is being left out of consideration. The professor points out that it is the literal authors' fault ntead of the readers's, because they write some books very difficult to understand and they should lead literature easier in order to attract the audience.

yagiliang

不好意思，改晚啦

yagiliang

hello，你16号的综合是还没上传咩？给我个链接呗。
我的链接是http://forum.chasedream.com/thread-877065-1-1.html。谢谢

yagiliang

11.15的综合改好啦，你看看

evolanna

小伙伴，15号的是不是还米有上传咩

笨笨熊vanilla

小伙伴~ 谢谢帮我改作文哦~ 苦逼大四狗的23号成绩出来了~ 你24号的加油撒~~~

carmensh

笨笨熊vanilla 发表于 2013-12-4 21:23
小伙伴~ 谢谢帮我改作文哦~ 苦逼大四狗的23号成绩出来了~ 你24号的加油撒~~~

也谢谢你拉！！！你怎么样啊？？我的今早也出来啦~~大四狗终于心酸的上了100了，虽然不高，听力拉后腿了~~