写作不可怕，有恒心，高分拿~ 求狠批！！！

hemodata

lyslj001 发表于 2013-8-18 01:18
理解的很对。 即使提到阅读的内容，也应该是作为听力的一种反驳或者认同的内容，最重要的还是突出听力是 ...

是的，这篇稍微特别一点。
不过俗话说嘛，做多错多，如果不能记忆的特别清楚，不写出来比较保险。
如果真是特清楚，还说了特别多，大概还是要写出来的。
哈哈！那你加油刷考位，咱们一天考！

ps叫我小默就好～哈哈

whom123

lyslj001 发表于 2013-8-17 22:40
我写的是tpo9诶... 难道不对么？

8.16明明是tpo10啊。。。

hemodata

两个好东西=）
http://forum.chasedream.com/foru ... &fromuid=744721

hemodata

啊。。。你都木有更新。。。今天新写了作文
本来想过来帮你修改了以后，请你帮我看看呢
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lyslj001

TPO 12  WORD: 323   TIME: 完成用时30分钟。花费了30分钟修改。（有点越改越不成一体的赶脚~）

In the reading passage, the author cites three pieces of evidence in support to the argument that the teenage girl in the portrait which recently comes out for sale is exactly Jane Austen as a teenager. According to the lecture, however, the argument in the reading passage is open to doubt and the subject may not be the portrait of Jane Austen.

First and foremost, in 1882, when her family permitted the use of the portrait, Jane Austen had been dead for around 70 years. Almost none of those family members had the opportunity to see Jane Austen by themselves. Thus nobody can prove the young girl in the portrait to be Austen with certainty, and thus the lecturer believes the first evidence cited in the reading passage is poorly sounded.

Second, the lecturer refutes the reasoning in the reading passage that the young girl in the painting is sure to be Jane Austen because she resembles adult Jane Austen. In fact, even though the teenage girl in the picture looks similar to Jane Austen, she might be a relative of Austen, such as her cousins. In the big family of Jane Austen, there are sure to be girls who resemble Austen. Without more convincing evidence to eliminate this possibility, the reading passage seems to be poorly sounded.

Furthermore, the author in the reading passage claims that the portrait was painted in the period when Jane Austen was a teenager, and this claim is simply based on the style of the painting.  On the contrast, the lecturer points out that it’s impossible for the portrait to be painted when Jane Austen was so young, instead, it was not painted until Austen was over 27 years old, when the canvas of the portrait started selling. According to the lecturer, the reading passage apparently fails to take into account other factors such as the dates of the canvas, thus making mistakes in dating the portrait.

hemodata

lyslj001 发表于 2013-8-19 21:26
TPO 12  WORD: 323   TIME: 完成用时30分钟。花费了30分钟修改。（有点越改越不成一体的赶脚~）

In the re ...

我觉得还好啊，只是略微在段落之间有一些重复，和不是特别干净利落罢了
你看看捏

啊，我昨天的作文Kate和晓野改掉了
下一次的再麻烦你^^

sallygreen

请lyslj大牛姐姐修改~ 啦啦啦 踏着轻快的脚步留下一篇渣作！
come on!

hemodata

西瓜君，我今天练习了TPO21的综合写作，乃要不要跳跃一下跟我同题材练习捏？
酱紫我就很好意思麻烦你看看我的这个综合写的怎么样啦^^

http://forum.chasedream.com/foru ... &fromuid=744721

Mint静默

Hi~我是互改tpo13综合写作的小伙伴，你的作业捏？

我写完了哦
http://forum.chasedream.com/thread-870505-2-1.html

lyslj001

TPO 13： 作业来啦！感觉今天的不太好写呢。有些关键点没有听到很清楚，只好猜了。
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The lecturer believes that the reading passage is overstated in arguing that the large fossil business has undermined the development for both scientists and the general public. According to her, the benefits from the commercial sales of fossils acturally overweigh their negative consequences.

First and foremost, it's the fossil business that increases the amount of fossils available for public to see. In another word, there are no less fossils that the public have access to after the development of fossil business sales than before. In fact, with the commercial fossil trading in the market, institutions such as schools and museums will afford to buy more fossils to display in good prices. The reading passage, therefore, is unconvincing in arguing that the public will be less possible to see fossils and thus lose their interest.

Second, the lecturer points out that the reading passage is way too unrealistic in its statement, indicating that those fossils for sale need to pass through exams and tests before being put value. During the process, scientists are able to do scientific research on fossils. Therefore, the statement that fossils business reduces the opportunities for important scientific examinations is poorly sounded.

Furthermore, the lecturer admits the potential damages the fossil commerce has towards the fossils, but she also indicates that this should not be cited as a reason to refute the benefits of fossil business. She points out that the most important thing in scientific discoveries is to make unearth as more fossils as possible rather than to acquire complete data about the fossils. The buying and selling of fossils stimulate the increase of fossils unearth, thus contributing to the scientific researches toward fossils.