新人第一次参加，多多喷。。

freesia茜

People shouldbuy things made in their own countries, even if the prices are higher thanthose of the same things made by other countries.

With China’s, door opens wider and theworld globalization, goods exchanges between countries are not as hard as itformerly was. An increasing number of people choose to purchase production madefrom all over the world through the Internet or other methods. However, thereis a dilemma, whether people buy things made in their own counties or othercountries in which are much cheaper. People’s attitudes toward this problem arevarious. In my perspective, I prefer to buy production made in our own country.

First of all, a side of water and soilraises a side of people. The productions made in our country are more suitablefor the native people. For example, faced with the skin problems, would youlike to choose the domestic cosmetics or exotic? Are the imported skin-careproducts really appropriate for our skin? Compared with the thick and roughnessof Europeans, the skins of Asians are weaker and sensitive. Apparently,domestic manufacturers are more likely to produce the cosmetics which are mostappropriate for Chinese. Only work out measures to suit local condition, wecould get the best result.

Furthermore, buy the goods made in ourcountry could be in favor of the national enterprises by increasing theircapacity to compete with others. Due to various reasons, although we areindustrious and smart, our country is in the bottom of the whole worldindustrial division of labor, which means our large number of labor to createproducts and services can only exchange a little in return. In order to changethis situation, we must rely on our own national enterprises to improve ourposition in the industry chain. On the other hand, domestic industries offermore employment and have positive effect on economy.

Additional, domestic bands areindispensable symbols of our culture. Recently, a local clothing brand has beenfashionable for women in our country, the EXCEPT, which band our first ladywore when she visited foreign country accompanying with the president. What’smore, she also gave our own products to foreign friends as precious gifts. Thosenative products not only have excellent quality, but also have the Chinese characteristic;some also play a significant role in a period of time. Thus, a lot ofcollectors are attracted by those cultural meanings.

In general, buying things made in ourcountry have plenty of advantages. We could enjoy the better life, even morebenefit to our society and economy.

clermont129

With China’s,（这里好像不需要逗号吧？） door opens wider and the world globalization, goods exchanges between countries are not as hard as itformerly was. An increasing number of people choose to purchase production madefrom all over the world through the Internet or other methods. However, thereis a dilemma, whether people buy things made in their own counties or othercountries in which are much cheaper. People’s attitudes toward this problem are various. In my perspective, I prefer to buy production made in our own country.


First of all, a side of water and soil raises a side of people. The productions made in our country are more suitable for the native people. For example, faced with the skin problems, would you like to choose the domestic cosmetics or exotic? Are the imported skin-care products really appropriate for our skin? Compared with the thick and roughness of Europeans, the skins of Asians are weaker and sensitive（是否保持一致好些？）. Apparently,domestic manufacturers are more likely to produce the cosmetics which are most appropriate for Chinese. Only work（only by working） out measures to suit local condition, we could(could we应该用倒装吧？) get the best result.


Furthermore, buy（buying） the goods made in our country could be in favor of the national enterprises by increasing their capacity（capabilities?） to compete with others. Due to various reasons, although we are industrious and smart, our country is in the bottom of the whole world industrial division of labor, which means our large number of labor to create products and services(which means large number of products and services we create ) can only exchange a little in return. In order to change this situation, we must rely on our own national enterprises to improve our position in the industry chain. On the other hand, domestic industries offer more employment and have positive effect on economy.


Additional, domestic bands are indispensable symbols of our culture. Recently, a local clothing brand has been fashionable for women in our country, the EXCEPT, which band our first lady wore when she visited foreign country accompanying with the president. What’s more, she also gave our own products to foreign friends as precious gifts. Those native products not only have excellent quality, but also have the Chinese characteristic; some also play a significant role in a period of time. Thus, a lot of collectors are attracted by those cultural meanings.

In general, buying things made in our country have(has) plenty of advantages. We could enjoy the better life, even more benefit to our society and economy.

clermont129

你的文章很充实，结构也很好，比我的强太多了
我的水平有限，只能在细节上面提点小意见，还望见谅
还有一点，你文章中很多处明显的忘记空格的小毛病，在考试的时候注意一下

freesia茜

clermont129 发表于 2013-6-27 07:20
你的文章很充实，结构也很好，比我的强太多了
我的水平有限，只能在细节上面提点小意见，还望见谅
还有一点 ...

谢谢129的改正！空格估计是我word里打的时候换行木有注意。。。
我也比较粗心大意，而且写作文很费神，到最后我都烦的不行，所以我的结尾什么的基本都很简单，因为是在写不下去了。。
我也批改了你的作文，希望我们都能取的好成绩

freesia茜

6月27日
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The food people ate in the past is healthier than the food people eat today.


Along with the improvement of the life standard, an increasing number of people tend to pay more attention to health problems, and the first one they always consider is food. Some people believe that the diet we have today is healthier than it used to be because of the plentiful food options, adequate nutrition knowledge and advanced technology; meanwhile, others argue that the diet we ate before was more valuable than the food nowadays. Personally speaking, I agree with the latter opinion, and the reasons are following.

First of all, although, it’s undoubted that there are a great deal of food options for us to choose freely, we couldn’t say that all of them are nutritious and beneficial to our body. For instance, junk food such as KFC and McDonald are prevalent all over the world for their low price and fast speed, which play an essential role in suffering from obesity and high cholesterol. What’s more, their advertisements are always related to cartoon characteristics appealing a lot of kids ask their parents to consume and get the additional gifts. However, the food they provide, instead of containing the necessary nutrition, more likely to make children over nutrition.

Additional, as I mentioned in the first paragraph, with the rapid development of the media, people today are brainwashed by advertising which usually exaggerates the effects of the product. A recent study shows that food colors affect how much people eat, that means more colorful the food is the more people would eat. Thus, some food companies in order to encourage their sales by making their products more attractive and delicious, many food supplements are added, including some chemicals are harmful for human body such as Sudan red. In contrast to those who eat the regular intake of a prescribed amount, the people who eat the toxin absolutely has less longevity, about 10-15 years distance.

The last but not the least, technology is a sword with two blades. Compared with the artificial fertilizer used at present, the natural fertilizers used in the past are less pollution and additives. For example, diacety1 (DA) is one of the most common off-flavors in beer fermentation, which may trigger the bad mood but could shorten the period of production and improve efficiency. Another example is, more and more people tend to buy the organic food. However, according to a study commissioned by the British government point out that organic food is no healthier or more nutritious than regular food, but it is more expensive. Hence, does technology really make the food healthier is a controversial issue for the moment.

To sum up the above arguments, I totally hold the opinion that the foods we eat nowadays are not healthier than they used to.

freesia茜

huajiali 发表于 2013-6-27 16:56
蓝色表示建议；红色表示错误；黄色表示亮点
With（the reform and opening up of China China’s, door ope ...

谢谢你的意见！那个的确是谚语， 一方水土养育一方人的意思。
审题方面我有时会跑偏。。。的确没有提到关于价钱的问题