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叮叮西

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contributes on an enjoyable vacation, pls select one of three selection. Good food, Good location and with good friends to travel

If I have to choose among good location, with familiar friends to travel and delicious food, I will pick the good and unique food in one place with no doubt. To solve the questions from others like don't you want to share your happiness and experience with you friends and why I made this choice, I have to announce that delicious food actually could please me and the food I eat at the travelling place has more meaning than their tastes.

Frist, I believe that food reflect the culture of one place. For instance, girls in Sichuan Province love eating spicy food which could be related to the hot and wet weather in Sichuan. Also, there is a song of Song Zuying talking about girls in Sichuan are warm-hearted or even hot tempered that all could reminds people of their habit of eating spicy food there. In addition, crabs are eaten in different ways between north and south China. Northern people eating crabs with their hands tearing indicates people’s character in North China is unconstrained; while in south, such as Shanghai, people use stick to dig very little flash of crabs, showing the attentive culture of the South. Therefore, I could always tell the difference culture characteristics though eating.

Second, whenever I go sightseeing to one place, I would always buy every kind of famous food there and taste them. For instance, one year ago, I went to Ji Nan, which is in Shan Dong Province. My friends and I went to the famous Fu Rong Street immediately after us getting off the train. Fu Rong Street is a snack food street where a lot of delicious food converges such as Crispy Durian Cake, big French Fries and Boiled Tripe. The moment I ate a Crispy Durian Cake, I felt that my heart was in incomparable happiness, my face soon covered with big smile. Thus, I believe good food could give me the most pleasure.

Last but not the least, I have a useful method to dig out the most delicious food in one place even it is unfamiliar to all the tourists. The method is finding restaurants on the website of the General Rate where many restaurants’ introduction and people’s rate converge. What makes the website so reliable is that most of the people writing reviews for the restaurants have already eat there. With this website, I could find the most special food in any corner of China.

Therefore, delicious food is my favorite and I cannot eat regular food that could be eaten everywhere when I enjoy my vacation.

viviyl

From my point of view, socialactivities are more important than meals in one school as long as the basicneeds of students' meals are met. Reasons why social life is so critical forstudents are that it could help students learn their major(s) and makes the school life more colorful.

In the first place, different kinds of social activities improve students'knowledge in their field. For instance, once the Beijing Sport University,(逗号去掉)funded the students in the management department to go sightseeing at thenational Gymnasium. Students walking around there saw the ordinary sits as wellas the VIP balconies, and gained more knowledge about how to economicallyoperating venues. It is the professor Lin, who teach the venuemanagement class, bring(brought) the students tothe venue (如果是强调句的话就差个that)and with his patient explanation, moststudents have a clearer understanding of building, operating and exploiting of venues. Thus, funding students' social lifecould be beneficial for the study which could not be simply improved by fundingmeals.

In the second place, offering financial aid for students' social activitiesenriches students' lives. Like the dancing hall built last year in our school,it enables many dancing lovers to dance after classes with their friends. Also,with this dancing hall, a dance club was set up, attracting many students. Manypeople in our school agree that the new hall enrich(es)students' lives and makes them relaxed(releases them) from their burden of study.Another instance is the dancing party held and funded by both the QinghuaUniversity and our school. Students attending the party made many friends andknew interesting stories happened at the other school. Thus, either the fund ofdancing hall or party highly enriches students’ social lives.

There is another reason for me to choose funding students’ social life insteadof meal. The reason is that in China nowadays, most of the schools couldprovide students with enough food which is healthy as well. Although theextra funding would bring more delicious food and more variety(various) kinds of dishes, students might not trulydevelop themselves well with good food. Also, many students tend to eating offthe campus with their friends even the dishes at school are well-tasted. Inthis case, improvement of meal could not actually secure students eatinghealthily. (这一段论证的不是很清晰。可以直接说即使学校投钱改善食堂食品卫生，但由于学生喜欢出去吃，所以作用不大。)

Therefore, I believe school should fund social activities more than the meal oncampus cafeteria for the social life could bring more benefit(s) to students than everyday meals.

观点和论据都很好。语言再流畅一点就更好了~加油~

cookiezwy

红色为语法错误，黄色高亮为优秀的用句~
contributes on an enjoyable vacation, pls select one of three selection. Good food, Good location and with good friends to travel

If I have to choose among good location, with（with多余）familiar friends to travel and delicious food, I will pick the good and unique food in one place（首先in the first place） with no doubt. To solve the questions（solve the problem） from others like don't you want to share your happiness and experience with you friends and why I made this choice, I have to announce that delicious food actually could （could actually）please me and the food I eat at the travelling place has more meaning than their tastes.

Frist, I believe that food reflects the culture of one place. For instance, girls in Sichuan Province love eating spicy food which could be related to the hot and wet weather in Sichuan. Also, there is a song of Song Zuying talking about（用that ，about为介词，不能接从句） girls in Sichuan are warm-hearted or even hot tempered that（用and all that，用that从句awkward ） all could reminds people of their habit of eating spicy food there. In addition, crabs are eaten in different ways between north and south China. Northern people eating crabs with their hands tearing （不是人indicate，是人吃螃蟹indicate，所以用Northern people eat crabs with their hands tearing， which indicates）indicates people’s character in North China is unconstrained; while in south, such as in Shanghai, people use stick to dig very little flash of crabs, showing the attentive culture（感觉这个搭配怪怪的。。） of the South. Therefore, I could always tell the difference culture characteristics though eating.

Second, whenever I go sightseeing to one place, I would always buy every kind of famous food there and taste them. For instance, one year ago, I went to Ji Nan, which is in Shan Dong Province（直接Ji Nan， Shandong Province，不需要用定从）. My friends and I went to the famous Fu Rong Street immediately after us getting off the train.（after getting off） Fu Rong Street is a snack food street where a lot of delicious food converges such as Crispy Durian Cake, big French Fries and Boiled Tripe. The moment I ate a Crispy Durian Cake, I felt that my heart was in incomparable happiness, my face soon covered with big smile. Thus, I believe good food could give me the most pleasure.

Last but not the least, I have a useful method to dig out the most delicious food in one place even it is unfamiliar to all the tourists. The method is finding restaurants on the website of the General Rate where there are many restaurants’ introduction and people’s rate converge. What makes the website so reliable is that most of the people writing reviews for the restaurants have already eaten there. With this website, I could find the most special food in any corner of China.

Therefore, delicious food is my favorite and I cannot eat regular food that could be eaten everywhere when I enjoy my vacation.

总结（个人感觉，借鉴吸收哈~）
逻辑方面：
感觉第一个点没有体现出为什么要选择食物作为旅游目的地的原因，可以进一步说明I enjoy experiencing different meaning of one food in different places
第三点感觉在谈你找寻美食的方法，而没有直截了当的说为什么你要选择美食作为旅游考量

然后就是语法方面还需加强~