4月12日作文互改讨论

竹林中人

4月11日的Issue互改题目是28.The surest indicator of a great nation is representednot by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by thegeneral welfare of its people.

Write a response in which you discuss theextent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain yourreasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position,you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold trueand explain how these considerations shape your position.

与此类似的题目是85/94/113/120/121/127/145/147

Argument互改题目是A41：The following appeared in a health newsletter. "A ten-year nationwide study of the effectiveness of wearing a helmet while bicycling indicates that
ten years ago, approximately 35 percent of all bicyclists reported wearing helmets, whereas today
that number is nearly 80 percent. Another study, however, suggests that during the same ten-year
period, the number of bicycle-related accidents has increased 200 percent. These results
demonstrate that bicyclists feel safer because they are wearing helmets, and they take more risks
as a result. Thus, to reduce the number of serious injuries from bicycle accidents, the government
should concentrate more on educating people about bicycle safety and less on encouraging or
requiring bicyclists to wear helmets."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument.
Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are
for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

与此类似的题目是123/125
写完互改完之后，大家有什么想法，比如你觉得哪位同学的想法比较好，是你自己没想到的，或者是文章结构上很好，亦或是你有什么疑问，希望互改组的同学能交流交流

竹林中人

参考：Issue28.1、肯定伟大国家的第一要素是人民生活好福利好  the overriding imperative of any democratic
state is to enhance the general welfare of its citizenry       Great nation   的定义，prosperous in economy,
democratic in politics , affluence in cultures.      The welfare of the people, including the living
conditions, the social security system and the charity of developed country is  
人民生活都保障不了的国家绝对不伟大，即使  elite 有成就也毫无意义   
                    2、社会繁荣  社会整体的成功统治者、艺术家、科学家的成就也是伟大国家的重要因素
(a)  Scientific and technological achievements serve in the first place to enhance a
nation’s general welfare.(Advance in medical treatment, transportation, communication,
etc)
(b)  Artistic achievements could not be neglected, though. They help to make a
nation a better place to reside. (Provide inspiration, life people’s spirit and bring about
creativity and imagination, all of which spur us to make more accomplishments.)
(c)The military and diplomatic accomplishment of its leaders could neither be ignored in the
general welfare of a nation. (The War of Independence)
伟大国家中的统治者、艺术家、科学家要为人民谋福利   

Argu：1> 事故数量上升不能说明现在这个问题比以前严重。因为人口的增加，骑车的人增多，都可能使得
相应的事故数目上升。在这个问题上，也许看看事故率是否有上升会更有说服力。
2> 出事故是否与戴头盔有关，论者没有相关资料。首先论者对于戴头盔会使人更容易冒险的结论完
全没有根据，他没有提供任何资料证明戴头盔的人都觉得这样很安全。完全有可能戴头盔的人会比不
戴的人更加小心。
3> 其次论者也没有提供有多少戴头盔的人出了事故，如果出事故的人大多数都没有戴头盔，这样就
不能证明戴头盔会使得容易出现事故。

普渡哥

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