Hello,
Let me list out a few key giveaways here.
1) It is good to know you are part of a profitable business at such a young age, but remember, your MBA application is all about YOU. What have you done? What leadership roles have you taken? What contributions have you made? What challenges have you taken on? This leads to the ultimate question: why you need a MBA, and how that can help you? Your argument should be backed by details and evidence.
2) You may want to justify your career goal. Prior to managing your startup, it seemed you wanted to dive into IB. Not sure which Citi division you interned with, but clearly EY is not IB.
3) Your GPA is much lower than AdCom would typically expect for business majors. It is not a decent score even if you are studying at highly competitive schools. You need to justify this as well, especially you have literally no post-graduate full-time working experience.
4) Final advice: take some time and reflect on the question "why MBA". You do have an interesting background, but I do not see too many of your qualifications here.
Best,
-- by 会员 kennyz1120 (2013/1/22 3:11:19)
关于我的GPA我觉得是唯一的弱点, 只要additional essay写一下, 解释清楚就好了. 我去Stanford 问过了, 他们是说, 他们喜欢看到一个人的成绩在进步, 我的成绩恰好是这样的. 他们建议我写一个additional essay 就好.
谢谢你的建议.