argument 38 求点评

dedede1

第一次写。。。i don't find the reasons listed by vice president can necessarily lead to the conclusion that their company profits will increase and the reasons are the followings.
     first,there are a lot of reasons why their major competitor no longer makes an alpaca overcoat, it could be their competitor got into trouble and broke down. it also could be the customer demand for alpaca overcoat decrease over the 5 years so that their competitor stop making it.Since we don't know how the customer demand changes, we can't draw a conclusion that there will be pent-up customer demand just by knowing their major competitor no longer makes alpaca overcoat.
     second,even though their major competitor no longer makes alpaca overcoat, there could still have a lot of big companies which make a large amount of alpaca overcoat. these companies might no be their major competitor 5 years ago, but now they are!
      third, even though we know that price of most types of clothing has increased in each year, it is still not plausible to say that customers should be willing to pay significantly higher prices for alpaca overcoat because we don't know whether customers favor every clothing equally or not and perhaps the alpaca overcoat is that kind of clothing which don't belong to "most types of clothing" list.
      the last but not least,profits has to do with not only the price that the customers willing to pay but also the numbers of customer and the cost of the product. Since we don't know the changes in the number of customer and the cost of the alpaca overcoat, we can't draw a conclusion that profits will increase just by knowing the price will increase.  
好像才280个词。。。我想问问issue一般要写多少字。。？
求点评文章。。。谢谢大家啊

普渡哥

结构需要改进，作者可以先背三篇范文。

竹林中人

这篇argu先不做评价，建议LZ能好好读读OG上对AW的讲解和要求，还有重点分析OG上的五六分的文章，比如文章开头中间和结尾，可以写些什么怎么写。
argument重在推理，也就是说你在质疑的时候，原因一定要说清楚，比如你在文章中列出其他的很多的可能性，你就需要说明下为什么有这么多的可能性，题目没有考虑到什么或者题目犯了什么样的错误等。