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2012年12月初开始准备托福，好好努力，争取明年考个好成绩！
大家一起学习，共同进步。加油！
ps:之前发的第一篇作文贴在这里，不用那个帖子了。

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第一次写作文啊，里面肯定有很多错误，求大家批改啊，谢谢啦

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people today are more likely to help others than young people


Do you find,recently,that many homeless children come back to their hometown?do you know,nowadays,that numerous poor preson live more happiness?do you hear,lately,significant students help others?young people,currently,help others more likely than young in past.

Young person help a homeless child back to their hometown.in this year,a young person found a homeless child,which native place is not here,lie down on the street. He communicate with him and contacted to his parents. It is extraordinarily happy to parents to know where their child is.the parents thank for the young person and come bak.young’s behaviour makes family replace to happiness.

The young man,increasingly,who is rich devote their money to help poor preson. in recent years.according to maslow’s need hierarchy theory.when people lives happiness,they will realize their self volue.so this is a reason why rich young man helps others.in our city,when a rich young man travels in a small village ,he finds that there is no electricity and no convenient water.he thinks it is inconvenient to villagers.thus,he devotes money and changes villager’s life.

By the high of education,more and more college students pay attention to public welfare.they practice the commonweal organization to help people who need help.i am a volunteer in Xinjiang Real Commonweal organization.our form has a large volunteers from differentuniversities.we always go to Nursing homes,played chess with them or chatted with them,that makes them happy.

In the past,young people constantly help others,like help other carry water,help other clean the house,help other baby-sit the child.however,people,nowadays are more likely to help others than before.as the more education young peoople have,the more help the will do.in addition,the the rich men continually grow so they also will do help other!

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12月7号作业Do you agree or disagree: economic growth seems to be more important than environmental concerns.
Oboiously,environmental concerns which is a important factor,affect our health,our cities,and also our world.it is apparent that environment is related to our life.
Air quality,water quality,food quality lead to our health.also environment results in air,water,food.in face,environment affects our health.in the past years,people are health and hardly ill.however,rencently,most of us find who have strange illness.The doctor cannot explain what is the illness.He told that the reason,why people have strange illness,is the environment makes it.in other word,the change of environments makes the change of genes.The genes lead to our body health.There is no one but hate bad environments.Those who work in a chaotic factory must have been a terrible mood.so we must need a good environment.
Also,the development of a place depends on the environment.A place which is beautiful and clean can absorb lots of people and make place has a great economical grrowth.For instance,if numerous people live in one new place,they should have necessities.Like food,attires and so on. But where have these come from?people purchase these from another cities.on the other hand. It is relaxing for people to tour.hence,incresing people spend mony on travel. So the trade produce.why dose trade produce?The reason is that a right environment is in this place.in fact,environment is a foundation of economy.No good environment,no economy growth.
Besides,earth also rests on environment.Nowadays,some people kill animals to money, some peole cut the tree then the solid land changes into easy to flow,some people use car as much as possible,it produce plenty of tail gas to make ozonosphere empty.If it last,we will face to the end of the world and we cannot talk about economy growth.we only have one earth,it is most important to protect earth than any other.We should follow with environment concerns.
Economic growth emblems the development of country become increasingly strong.Chinese GDP adds to nearly 8% every year.More and more freeways set up,high-spleed rails set up.yet,what happend?The freeways collapsed,the high-spleed rails collided.Economic growth also bring some problems that we should consider.To grow quickly or not,that is a question.Nevertheless,our environment concerns relate to our health,our cities,our world.There is no doubt that environment concerns are important thing.

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再发一遍啊，刚才没有大空格，看起来太乱
Do you agree or disagree: economic growth seems to be more important than environmental concerns.

Oboiously,environmental concerns which is a important factor,affect our health,our cities,and also our world.it is apparent that environment is related to our life.

Air quality,water quality,food quality lead to our health.also environment results in air,water,food.in face,environment affects our health.in the past years,people are health and hardly ill.however,rencently,most of us find who have strange illness.The doctor cannot explain what is the illness.He told that the reason,why people have strange illness,is the environment makes it.in other word,the change of environments makes the change of genes.The genes lead to our body health.There is no one but hate bad environments.Those who work in a chaotic factory must have been a terrible mood.so we must need a good environment.

Also,the development of a place depends on the environment.A place which is beautiful and clean can absorb lots of people and make place has a great economical grrowth.For instance,if numerous people live in one new place,they should have necessities.Like food,attires and so on. But where have these come from?people purchase these from another cities.on the other hand. It is relaxing for people to tour.hence,incresing people spend mony on travel. So the trade produce.why dose trade produce?The reason is that a right environment is in this place.in fact,environment is a foundation of economy.No good environment,no economy growth.

Besides,earth also rests on environment.Nowadays,some people kill animals to money, some peole cut the tree then the solid land changes into easy to flow,some people use car as much as possible,it produce plenty of tail gas to make ozonosphere empty.If it last,we will face to the end of the world and we cannot talk about economy growth.we only have one earth,it is most important to protect earth than any other.We should follow with environment concerns.

Economic growth emblems the development of country become increasingly strong.Chinese GDP adds to nearly 8% every year.More and more freeways set up,high-spleed rails set up.yet,what happend?The freeways collapsed,the high-spleed rails collided.Economic growth also bring some problems that we should consider.To grow quickly or not,that is a question.Nevertheless,our environment concerns relate to our health,our cities,our world.There is no doubt that environment concerns are important thing.