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flywood

机经中的一题,只是三段的内容,没有头尾,大家看看,我每次写作文都觉得自己写得其恶心无比,唉!

13.Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants. Other people prefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Improve the affection of people. Human being is emotional creature who needs to constantly share the feeling and exchange the ideas to keep the close relationship. Preparing food at home enable people gather together to cook for dinner, which provides them an opportunity to communicate and create a happy family atmosphere. As a result, cooking at home obviously lead to the closer relationship among a family.

Cooking at home contribute greatly to the health of people. In contrast to food prepared in restaurants, which contain too many unhealthy ingredients such as pigment, which make food more beautiful in order to appeal to customers, food cooked at home can ensure the nutrition of the food and better balance the all kinds of food given that people can control over the ingredient.

It should be admitted that people could enjoy convenience when they eat outside. However, considering its high costs, not all the people have opportunities to experience it. Conversely, people can spend very little money purchasing food and cook at home, which saves a large amount of money. Therefore, eating at home becomes the popular way for the majority of people. Acting like them, I would also like eating at home.

guandream

以下是引用flywood在2004-11-11 4:22:00的发言：

机经中的一题,只是三段的内容,没有头尾,大家看看,我每次写作文都觉得自己写得其恶心无比,唉!

13.Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants. Other people prefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Improve the affection of people. (sentence fragment)Human being is emotional creature who needs to constantly share the feeling and exchange the ideas to keep the close relationship. (this sentence comes up suddently, you need to arrange this paragraph))Preparing food at home enable people gather together to cook for dinner, which provides them an opportunity to communicate and create a happy family atmosphere. As a result, cooking at home obviously leads to the closer relationship among a family.(it is a good point, but need to rewrite)

Cooking at home contributes greatly to the health of people. In contrast to food prepared in restaurants, which contain too many unhealthy ingredients such as pigment, which make food more beautiful in order to appeal to customers, food cooked at home can ensure the nutrition of the food and better balance the all kinds of food given that people can control over the ingredient.(good point)

It should be admitted that people could enjoy convenience when they eat outside. However, considering its high costs, not all the people have opportunities to experience it. Conversely, people can spend very little money purchasing food and cook at home, which saves a large amount of money. Therefore, eating at home becomes the popular way for the majority of people. Acting like them, I would also like to eat eating at home.

except for the first paragraph, it is a pretty good essay. but you need care the subject and verb agreement.

I think that you need the introduction part in your essay; otherwise it is too abrupt. your conclusion is good.

flywood

thanks, I will rewrite it later.

soaring

没有开头，没有结尾。。。

看看置顶的汇总吧

flywood

以下是引用Soaring_2004在2004-11-12 0:10:00的发言：

没有开头，没有结尾。。。

看看置顶的汇总吧

是一定要把头尾写齐是吗?

soaring

是的

这个是结构

如果是机考更要写齐