10.19Do you agree or disagree? It is better to work with your own computer and telephone at yourhome than work in your company's office. Relax, efficial. Do better Freedom. Control the time more convenience Save cost of the company
With the booming of the technology. Computer and telephone play an increasing essential role in our daily life. We now can work at home with the new technology efficiently instead of working in the boring office. As for me, I entirely support the statement that working with computer and telephone at home is better than working in the office. Three points in different dimensions will be demonstrated to testify my point. First of all.Contrary to work in company's office, it is more efficient to work at home with the help of computer. The home often the symbol of relax and warm, and working in this kind of atmosphere, people definitely focus on his work and perform perfectly. As for most people, when they step into a strange environment where may makes them feel uncomfortable at first time, they cannot put into a high standard of work situation immediately. They need to face a process of adapting to this environment. In the opposite, however, working at home also can save the process. So working at home will be more efficient and time saver. Moreover, working at home contributes to a flexible schedule. As we all known, when work in company's office we must obey a serious schedule, like reach the office at 8 am and go home until 16 pm. That is not a hommization system for most people. There is no need to worried about the problem which has been mentioned above when we work at home. We can get up whenever we want without delaying the company's work. We can witness the children's any big moment with the flexible schedule. This case is not rare, and in reality many people generally need to refer to the same phenomenon at the same time. Finally. Working at home also can save the cost of the company, and then add the profit of the company in some way. If all the workers work at home, the company would save a big number of money which must be used for the facilities and the department in the past. Under the present crisis of the economy, many company now experiencing a really hard time. There is no doubt that this method can release the pressure of the company. Admittedly, working in the office makes the coordination of the company's different department more convenient, however, pales in comparison to the advantage of working at home. I therefore stick to my standpoint to choose working at home is better than working in the office as my final choice.
谢谢你给我改的~~wil的问题以前没注意到 还是句式太单一的缘故把 黄色 好的 红色 我觉得有问题的 绿色 建议 With the booming of the technology.(逗号哈) Computer and telephone play an increasing essential role in our daily life. We now can work at home with the new technology efficiently instead of working in the boring office. As for me, I entirely support the statement that working with computer and telephone at home is better than working in the office. Three points in different dimensions will be demonstrated to testify my point. First of all. Contrary to work in company's office, it is more efficient to work at home with the help of computer. The home （谓语呢~~）often the symbol of relax and warm, and working in this kind of atmosphere, people definitely focus on his work and perform perfectly.（再具体一点就更好了，有点突兀哈） As for most people, when they step into a strange environment where may makes them feel uncomfortable at first time, they cannot put into a high standard of work situation immediately. They need to face a process of adapting to this environment. In the opposite, however, （我觉得这两个词有点重）working at home also can save the process. So working at home will be more efficient and time saver（额，我觉得一个adj和一个n.并列有点奇怪）. Moreover, working at home contributes to a flexible schedule. As we all known, when work in company's office we must obey a serious(我觉得换成rigid好些) schedule, like reach（reaching） the office at 8 am and go(going) home until 16 pm. That is not a hommization(没看懂呢) system for most people. There is no need to worried （worry）about the problem which has been mentioned above when we work at home. （来个连词吧，个人觉得这前后是你表达的两个观点）We can get up whenever we want without delaying the company's work. We can witness the children's any big moment with the flexible schedule. This case is not rare, and in reality many people generally need to refer to the same phenomenon at the same time. (没读懂呢，最后一句。。) Finally. Working at home also can save the cost of the company, and then add the profit of the company in some way. If all the workers work at home, the company would save a big number（amount好点把） of money which must be used for the facilities and the department in the past. Under the present crisis of the economy, many company(companies) 谓语呢 now experiencing a really hard time. There is no doubt that this method（写出来好点，不然this的指代真不好找） can release the pressure of the company. Admittedly, working in the office makes the coordination of the company's different department more convenient, however（这两个动词中间少了连词，however它不是连词啊。。）, pales in comparison to the advantage of working at home. I therefore stick to my standpoint to choose working at home is better than working in the office as my final choice.
谢谢修改~~看的很仔细啊·！This case is not rare, and in reality many people generally need to refer to the same phenomenon at the same time.这句是我摘抄的一个大神的，用来凑字数的···意思说 这种情况并不少见，在现实中 人们需要面对类似的事情在相似的时间。 hommization system 人性化的制度，我想表达这个意思 第三段你说少连词的地方，我写的时候也感觉到了···不过不知道补什么···
哈哈 因为我真的改了很久啊~~ 讨论一下： 1， many people generally need to refer to the same phenomenon 这里refer to是提及的意思把，有面对的意思吗，回复我个~ 2，人性化的制度 humanized system, "hommization"我在word里改时底下画了跟红线。。 3，连词的问题我不确定，等我在想想再跟你说把~~
谢谢修改~~看的很仔细啊·！This case is not rare, and in reality many people generally need to refer to the same phenomenon at the same time.这句是我摘抄的一个大神的，用来凑字数的···意思说 这种情况并不少见，在现实中 人们需要面对类似的事情在相似的时间。 hommization system 人性化的制度，我想表达这个意思 第三段你说少连词的地方，我写的时候也感觉到了···不过不知道补什么···
哦 这样把 Admittedly, working in the office makes the coordination of the company's different department more convenient。however，it pales in comparison to the advantage of working at home. 因为你又有admittedly又有 however，明显就是两句话，很难不补出主语，就写成一个句子，我是这么理解的。。
to mention or speak about someone or something We agreed never to refer to the matter again.Although she didn't mention any names, everyone knew who she was referring to. 我查的灵格斯词典，上面一行是解释，这应该是这个短语最接近的一种解释了
哦 这样把 Admittedly, working in the office makes the coordination of the company's different department more convenient。however，it pales in comparison to the advantage of working at home. 因为你又有admittedly又有 however，明显就是两句话，很难不补出主语，就写成一个句子，我是这么理解的。。
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We agreed never to refer to the matter again.
