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[作文互改] issue 89。凌乱又不顺,求指教> <

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发表于 2012-8-21 21:37:59 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
89. Claim: Manyproblems of modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system.



Reason: Laws cannot change what is in people's hearts or minds.







Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.






The law is of close relationship to human beings, stay important in many aspects varying from maintaining the order of the daily life including the traffic, the trade, the competition to punishing the crime, protecting our civil rights. By and large, the law does solve many problems existed in human society. However, just as the speaker cited, due to the unchangeable of the essence of human’s morality and mind, there are still problems without reach of the law.



The first reason accounts for it was that the power of law is mandatory, as for circumstances where it fails to force people to do as ruled, men will follow their heart to shape their behaviors. And the results will differ. Take relationship between people and people, or people and nature for example, if there is no friendliness and kindness existed in human’s heart, law cannot help to build a harmonious environment and to kill the distance between heart and heart.



Then since it is the mandatory power disappears in some circumstance that lead to the above problems. Can we just generalize the power of the law into the every corner? Obviously unrealistic, in that over stiffened and detailed rules are so dangerous that they may cause more problem than those they solve. Inflexible law cannot synchronize with the changing speed of concrete conditions, so a law ruling everything will not only squeeze out the freedom, the right of people but also make the problem worse. For instance, if there is a provision in the law that any student contradicting their teachers will be punished. Apparently, when put in to use it won’t do anything good to cultivate students’ respect to the older since they do not know the reason and meaning for doing so. What’ more, in some cases there may exists wrongheaded or malicious teachers not deserve respect.



Aside from the fact that the law does not work everywhere, we must also admit that the law does not affect every person. The reason lies in that human being’s heart or minds matters greatly in the process where the law functions. That’s the reason to explain away the paradox why under the coercion of the law, many people still undertake crimes such as taxation evasion and pilferage too. The law is not omnipotent. Its power resides in the people’s will to obey it which is further determined by people’s heart and mind. Without this underlying factor, law is nothing but dead words. Thus, the law does not change people or shape people’s behavior but only to some extant rule people from achieving the least of the morality standard.



The last reason I want to note here to bolster the author’s conclusion is law is never complete and prefect. Just and kind provisions in the law contribute a lot to the society, while wicked and unjust provisions in the law damage the fruit of the human society, and the final question whether the law is good and effective is depend on human’s permanent efforts to shape it using our own minds and heart.



In sum, law is a set of effective rules to maintain the fundamental justness and the morality standard, therefore it provide ways to solve problems, but there are always circumstances without reach of law and even the law itself is determined by human beings’ heat and mind.





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沙发
发表于 2012-8-21 22:22:25 | 只看该作者
human beings, stay这个地方我觉得有必要加一个连接词
the competition to punishing the crime??
The first reason accounts for it 。。it最好不要跨段指代,理解起来很费力。
Then since it is the。。 这一整句应当是到问号那里为止,但你在can那里就结束了,习惯不好
板凳
 楼主| 发表于 2012-8-21 22:33:16 | 只看该作者
human beings, stay这个地方我觉得有必要加一个连接词
the competition to punishing the crime??
The first reason accounts for it 。。it最好不要跨段指代,理解起来很费力。
Then since it is the。。 这一整句应当是到问号那里为止,但你在can那里就结束了,习惯不好
-- by 会员 竹林中人 (2012/8/21 22:22:25)


嗯嗯,那个是vary from A to B
其余的已经改正> <谢谢
这篇尤其没有思路啊
地板
 楼主| 发表于 2012-8-21 22:41:59 | 只看该作者
The law is of close relationship to human beings, staying important in many aspects varying from maintaining the order of the daily life to punishing the crime, protecting our civil rights

The first reason accounting for the stated claim is that the power of law is mandatory

Then since it is the mandatory power disappears in some circumstance that lead to the above problems.,can we just generalize the power of the law into the every corner?
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发表于 2012-8-23 00:41:50 | 只看该作者
我觉得那个obviously unrealistic 可以改为obviously not,接上面的问句。还有总体感觉思路有点混乱诶
6#
发表于 2012-8-26 14:58:12 | 只看该作者
just for sharing.


Human nature—good or bad? If we can simply divide itinto these two absolute sides.
Almost any single problem can be regarded as a product of the bad side of our human nature.  
It is also almost impossible for a human being to wipe out all the gloomy, dirty, ugly part from his nature, never to say a large number of them.
As a result, laws are built, in order to regulatepeople, to minimize the damage or negative influence out of the bad deeds, therefore, to solve problems.
Here, what we have to clarify is that laws or legistical system is never omnipotent:
Laws can nether completely eliminite problems, damages, or bad things in the world but minimize them, or lower the occurrence of them.
Also, although laws can somehow affect what we believe,and shape our behaviors, they are never omnipotentto remodel a personality, changing his mind or format his heart.  
Thus, we have to recognize that
           There are still many problems out there that can never be simply solved by laws orlegistical systems,
           And,
           Laws~can affect our mind, guide us from doing bad things, but there is limitation for this kind of power of changing.
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