蝴蝶渡海的作文贴，让砖来的更猛烈一些吧

蝴蝶渡海

Ever since we were child, we had kept in touch with different kinds of friends. As the times goes on, some of them become intimates eventually, while others will never meet again. When I at fundamental school, one of the teachers said that wec
an know a person through the types of friends he had. Due to the shallow experience, I did not consider what the exactly mean he said at that period. But now, I am fully supportive the opinion that we can acquaint with a person through the types of friend he had.


To demonstrate the perspective, my main reason is that your intimate friends’ disposition can reflect your character indeed. We human being usually chooses the one who has the similar disposition, same profession or the common habits with you to make friend, and always shares interesting ideas between each other. For example, a guy who has a PhDs degree and work In the lab don’t like to make friend with a. drunkard. An athlete will have little chances to make real friends with a printer. That is to say, it is the common factor which exists in our character connects us together. To some certain extent, I am not only on behalf of myself, but also reflect what the level we are in.



What is more, between friends, we help each other and fight with the task in common. The real friend will help you when you are in the trap. As a Chinese old saying goes that, a friend in need is a friend indeed. Others will judge a person when the real problems come. Take a suit example, when there is a fierce competition confront with us, we have to organize the team to compete with others fighters. There is only one possibility that I cooperate with my best friends immediately. Because that is easy to communicate, to adjusting, working together. We friends are aiming at the same the goal and can relieve the each others’ stress when we meet the stubborn difficulty. Thus, we can observe a man’s friends’ character to deduce the man that what kind of person he real is indirectly.



However, we may imprudently judge someone just through the friends that he has. Each person has its various facets and someone even has multiple personality. When we want to acquaint with a stranger deeply, we had better judge it according to a long time.



In summary, due to the above-mentioned reasons, we could safely arrive at a conclusion that we can know a person through what types of friend he had. Under this instructions, I firmly believe that we human being need to choose friends more cautious.

steigen

Ever since we were （a）child, we had kept in touch with different kinds of friends. As the times goes on, some of them become intimates eventually, while others will never meet again. (觉得这块用完成时比较好些)When I （was）at fundamental school, one of the teachers said that wec
an know a person through the types of friends he had.（引用别人话的时候尽量要使用“”） Due to the shallow experience, I did not consider what the exactly mean he said at that period. But now, I am fully supportive the opinion that we can acquaint with a person through the types of friend he had（has）.
(觉得开头蛮好的，从背景-现象-结论)

To demonstrate the perspective, my main reason is that your intimate friends’ disposition can reflect your character indeed. We human being usually chooses（choose）the one who has the similar disposition, same profession or the common habits with you to make friend, and always shares interesting ideas between each other. For example, a guy who has a PhDs degree and work in the lab don’t like to make friend with a. drunkard. An athlete will have little chances to make real friends with a printer. That is to say, it is the common factor which exists in our character connects us together. To some certain extent, I am not only on behalf of myself, but also reflect what the level we are in( I am in.前面讲的是我自身，后面是我们，感觉不搭)



What is more, between friends, we help each other and fight with the task in common.(这里尽量不要用and 来承接) The real friend will help you when you are in the trap. As a Chinese old saying goes that, a friend in need is a friend indeed.（同样的问题，引用的句子一定要标明“”美国人是把这些东西都视为是侵权的） Others will judge a person when the real problems come.（这个句子有点汉语直译啊，润色下） Take a suit example, when there is a fierce competition confront with us, we have to organize the team to compete with others fighters（others / other fighters 。others是代词不能这么用）. There is only one possibility that I cooperate with my best friends immediately. Because that is easy to communicate, to adjusting, working（adjust, and work）together. We friends (我们这些朋友的意思吗？？)are aiming at the same the（可以没有） goal and can relieve the（可以没有）each other’s stress when we meet the stubborn difficulty. Thus, we can observe a man’s friends’ character to deduce the man that what kind of person he real is indirectly.



However, we may imprudently judge someone just through the friends that he has. Each person has its various facets and someone even has multiple personality. When we want to acquaint with a stranger deeply, we had better judge it according to a long time. (这个让步段，三个句子做的很好，但是把步给让出去了，记得一定要收回来，要再次强调朋友可以反映一个人的你的论点，这样会让这个段落更加饱满)



In summary, due to the above-mentioned reasons, we could safely arrive at a conclusion that we can know a person through what types of friend he had. Under this instructions, I firmly believe that we human being need to choose friends more cautious.



整体的结构上是做的是蛮好的，利用的是让步的写法，让文章更加完整了很多。

问题是 1.连接词，还有the 等等简单词汇的用法，也都需要细细斟酌的还有注意时态

2. 不要忘记下次引用语句时候要加上引号噢~~

3. 前后句连接的不够流畅，缺少逻辑性，我也很难攻克这一点啊。。。


说的不对的地方请多多谅解啊~ 我们一起多讨论讨论啊~~

蝴蝶渡海

8月28日

agree or disagree? If child want to do well in school, parents should limit the hours of watching TV programs or movies


It is undeniable that our parents accompany with our growing process. They are familiar with our disposition, our shortcoming, and they are looking forward to our bright future. Thus, there is an intense debate coming into pubic view. Should parents control the hours of watching TV programs or movies of their children? In my perspective, I am fully supportive of the opinion that parents should limit the hours of watching TV programs or movies of children.



To demonstrate the opinion, my main reason is that little child does not have the ability of controlling themselves well. To most of children, they are easily addicted in the TV programs or movies and have no other energy to focus on their homework. But homework is an essential learning process to let teachers knowing what you have understood. Furthermore, when child does not finish their homework in high-quality first time without any criticism, they will do it again. When this situation happens for long time they will failure in school. Taking my little brother for example, he is good at studying math and English until he fall into the movies and computer games. He does not have interest in learning and we are so worried about him. Thus, from my own experience, I am agreed with the opinion.



What is more, if child spends a huge of time in watching TV or movies in home, it means that they will have less time to communicate with their parents or their friends. It Is better for children to play games with their friends or classmates outsider. Through their communicating, child may make friend with some new guy and live in a good mood. To some other facets, undeniable, there are so many TV programs covered with violence or pornographic through a series of pieces. It is badly harmful to children’s thinking. Children who are watching too much TV will have huge possibility to make access with badly information and trap in the dilemma.



Admittedly, some people with the contrary situation emphasis that children can comprehend acknowledge by watching TV program. Nevertheless, the bad influence of watching too much TV over weights what it can benefit to children. Thus, I agree with my opinion definitely.



In summary, due to the above-mentioned reasons, we could safely arrive at a conclusion that. Parents should limit the hours of watching TV programs or movies of their children. Under this instructions, I firmly believe that children will grow up healthy

shendang

绿色-我觉得好的部分；红色-有点问题；蓝色-小结
It is undeniable that ourparents accompany with our growing process. They are familiar with ourdisposition, our shortcoming, and they are looking forward to our brightfuture. Thus, there is an intense debate coming into pubic view. Should parentscontrol the hours of watching TV programs or movies of their children? In myperspective, I am fully supportive of the opinion （看了那么多模板比较少见到的一个表支持的表达）that parents should limitthe hours of watching TV programs or movies of children.

我现在还在纠结什么样的开头是好的，不过你的开头有背景，有观点，感觉还是蛮清晰且简明扼要。但是感觉一开始没必要用undeniable，直接说就行了，而且后面也有用过。

To demonstrate the opinion, mymain reason is that little child does not have the ability of controllingthemselves well. To most of children, they are easily addicted in（应该是be addictited to 吧） the TV programs or movies and（have no other energy to focuson their homework 是结果，个人觉得应该改成表示结果的连接词会比较好，或者用GMAT常用的那种ing表示结果的表达） have no other energy tofocus on their homework. But homework is an essential learning process to letteachers knowing what you have understood. Furthermore, when child does notfinish their homework in high-quality first time without any criticism, theywill do it again. When this situation happens for long time they will failure（应该是fail） in school. Taking my littlebrother for example, he is good at studying math and English until he fall intothe movies and computer games. He does not have interest in learning and we areso worried about him. Thus, from my own experience, I am agreed with theopinion.




What is more, if child spends a huge of time in watching TVor movies in home, it means that they will have less time to communicate withtheir parents or their friends. It Is better for children toplay games with their friends or classmates outsider. Through theircommunicating, child may make friend with some new guy and live in a good mood.To some other facets,(觉得这一句之后的整个部分得重启一段，和之前communicate内容不同) undeniable（很简洁，感觉放在逗号中间，比there is no deny that那种长的好）, there are so many TVprograms covered with violence or pornographic through a series of pieces. Itis badly harmful to children’s thinking（mind 会好一点吗）. Children who are watchingtoo much TV will have huge possibility to make access with （make access with什么意思~~没搜到例句）badly information and trapin the dilemma.



Admittedly, some people withthe contrary situation emphasis that children can comprehend acknowledge bywatching TV program. Nevertheless, the bad influence ofwatching too much TV over weights what it can benefit to children. Thus, I agree with myopinion definitely.



In summary, due to the above-mentioned reasons, we couldsafely arrive at a conclusion that. Parents should limit thehours of watching TV programs or movies of their children. Under thisinstructions, I firmly believe that children will grow up healthy

逻辑清晰（我怎么当初就写不应该限制时间呢…），但感觉句型变化少了点~~
不是我8.29号不改TT，我晚上网络有问题，怎么也连不上…

蝴蝶渡海

There is no denying that teachers’ play an essential role to improve the quality of the education. Recently, some criticizers emphasis that, due to the low salary, teachers do not have much motivation to keep a high quality of education. Is it a cogent statement? In my perspectives, I am fully supportive that opinion that it is not the best method to improve quality of education by increasing teachers’ salaries.




To demonstrate this statement convincingly, my main reason is that there is no correlation between teachers’ salaries and quality of education. As we all know that, teachers who are care about the degrees of their students will not change their mind with the changing salaries. They are focusing on what the level their students have understood. For example, when I was studying at high school, the average salaries of teachers are much lower than the teachers’ in now. However, I do not think that previous teachers have any unfaithful to duty than nowadays teachers’. That is to say, salaries are not the crucial factors which influence the quality of education most.




What is more, factors which influence the quality of the education have huge kinds of categories. We have to admit that teachers’ salaries may motive parts of teachers to work hard. But, as far as I am concerned, teachers usually only have effect on teaching student how to learn, and he key point is that whether students want to learn or escape from the heavy task. We need to concentrate on the students’ learning mind, how to keep them in highly interest towards knowledge, and how to make their first right step independently.




Admittedly, with the salaries improving, teachers may offer some of salaries as a gift to motive their students more diligent. However, this circumstance may not happen in every class. Thus, the benefit from increasing salaries will not behave of obviously.




In summary, due to the above-mentioned reasons, we could safely arrive at a conclusion that increasing teachers’ salaries is not the best way to improve quality of education. Under this instruction, I firmly believe that the quality of education is not only the teachers’ duty, but also our hard working to make our world better.

蝴蝶渡海

9月15日
Some people think university professors should spend more time doing research while others
think they should spend more time educating students. What is your view?



There is no doubt that university professor’s main roles are to educate students and do some research to enhance innovation. However, some people advocate that it is more important for university professor to educate students than to do some research, while others suggest that professor need to do more research for their university. In my perspectives, I am fully supportive of the opinion that professors need to take more vigor to educating students.



To demonstrate the opinion, my main reason is that professor plays a key role in educating students and takes a vital responsibility for students’ learning process. Frankly speaking, each student wants to be taught by an excellent professor. A good university professor not only can instruct us professional knowledge, but let us have a good attitude of life. For instance, one of my university professors gives me a deep impression, and what his word has changed my attitude and makes me more confident. When my first time to take the university English competition, I did not have valor to compete with others and I feel extremely nervous and anxious to accomplish it. I even did not know what to do to adjust my heartbeats. Thus, I ask him for help and he gave me a lot of advice to make me relax. At last, he said a successful man is the one who can keep look forward and never draw back! These words made me feel that I have to fight just like warriors. As a consequence, I got an outstanding result and become more confident than before.

Another reason is that the future of the society is the young generations and our future’s development is based on their efforts and intelligence. Thus, Professor need take focus on educating students, because what he has done influenced us much. In other words, one professor who educated many high level students will also benefit to his research and earn him reputation.

Furthermore, obviously, it is important that one professor has its own research finding. Not only does a good research benefit to his reputation, but also has influence on university. Nevertheless, in my opinion, a professor who has many excellent students will get more admire and University’s rule of thumb is to develop the students who are eager to enhance themselves.



In conclusion, due to the all reasons we have emphasized, we can definitely assert that professor need to spend more time to educating students rather than do their research. If each professor could fulfill this obligation, I think each student will also dedicate their energy to study better.

超级无敌小鹤鹤

9.15 独立

蝴蝶渡海

The lecture refutes the view stated in the reading passage that Ethanol fuel made from plants will not become a good replacement for gasoline by claiming that Ethanol fuel will actually replace the energy of gasoline. There are many reasons to demonstrate the view.



First, the lecture rejects the statement in the reading passage that the new energy will not help to solve one of the biggest environment problems caused by gasoline. In the lecture the professor demonstrates a challenging idea that Ethanol fuel will not add any carbon dioxide because it is made of corn and sugar. What is more, during the plants growing, corn and other plants will absorb much carbon dioxide from the air. It will benefit to the environment in the long term.



Second, the belief in the passage that the amounts of new fuel will reduce the number of plants available for feeding farm animals and other uses is debated in the lecture. The professor assert s his opinion that there is existing a plant which can produce colossal numbers of new fuel, but most animals will not feed on it. Therefore, the perspective showed in the passage is not convinced.



Third, due to the huge production the new fuel’s price will become lower and lower, and the new fuel will compete with gasoline in terms of price in the future. This directly contradicts the points that without government supporting the new energy will much expensive than normally energy. Furthermore, the professor imply that the Ethanol fuel’s price will drop down to the 40% .

婷婷connie

9.18 综合
嘿嘿，婷婷来找错啦~
The lecture refutes the view stated in the reading passage that Ethanol fuel made from plants will not become a good replacement for gasoline by claiming that Ethanol fuel will actually replace(substitute/supplant,前面有replace啦) the energy of gasoline. There are many（three） reasons to demonstrate the view

First, the lecture rejects the statement in the reading passage that the new energy will not help to solve one of the biggest environment problems caused by gasoline. In the lecture the professor demonstrates a challenging idea that Ethanol fuel will not add any carbon dioxide because it is made of corn and sugar（这个听力木有啊）. What is more, during the plants growing, corn and other plants will absorb much carbon dioxide from the air（as its nutrient）. It will benefit to（benefit是及物动词~） the environment in the long term.

Second, the belief in the passage that the amounts of new fuel will reduce the number（这个用于可数名词，在这里不适合，应该用amount/quantity） of plants available for feeding farm animals and other uses is debated in the lecture. The professor asserts his opinion that there is existing a（part of）plant(cell membrane传说中细胞膜) which can produce colossal numbers（amounts/quantities） of new fuel, but most animals will not feed on it. Therefore, the perspective showed in the passage is not convinced.

Third, due to the huge production the new fuel’s price will become lower and lower, and the new fuel will compete with gasoline in terms of price in the future. This directly contradicts the points that without government supporting the new energy will much expensive than normally energy. Furthermore, the professor imply that the Ethanol fuel’s price will drop down to the 40% (as its production is three times greater).



Conclusion：句式多样，用词也很好，文采很好啦，不过部分听力细节还得注意哦~ 蝴蝶加油！

蝴蝶渡海

The lecture refutes the explanations stated in the reading passage that the yellow cedar steadily declining is due to the insect parasites, the brown bears and the changes of climates, by claiming that those hypothesis are not adequate.



First, lecturer rejects the statement in the reading passage that yellow cedar decline may be caused by insect parasites. He demonstrates a challenging idea that the healthy trees will produce a chemical material to resist the insect by themselves and the insects always eat the dead leaves. Thus, the insect is not the fundamental reason why the yellow cedar trees reduce.



Second, contrary to the opinion in the passage that brown bears destroy the cedar bark that the healthy tree cannot survive. The professor asserts that the brown bears only exist in the mainland. But the yellow cedar tree also died in a large number in the island. Therefore, it is not the brown bears that cause the tree's number declining.



Third, the professor said that the yellow cedar tree dead in the low elevation where the climate is warm and this directly contradicts the points that the gradual changes of climate cause the tree dead. It is not the low temperature in the winter that cause the tree dead