超经典ISSUE 1，求指正...

melodyskiing

1. As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.


The statement claims that the thinking ability of humans will deteriorate owing to the increasingly reliance on technology to solve problems. Admittedly, development of technology might impair some simple abilities, but it will promote humans’ thinking ability by offering extra time and technological support.


People increasingly rely on technology to solve simple and rigid problems, which are vapid and do not require much creative thinking. It might indeed lead to the deterioration in some of their abilities, such as sewing skill or calligraphy skill, which, however, will not definitely result in the deterioration in their thinking ability. Lack of sewing skill, we are able to design beautiful clothes; lack of calligraphy skill, we are still able to write wonderful articles. On the contrary, The technology replaces human force in solving these simple and rigid problems, leaving more time for people to think of deeper problems and do further research, achieving higher level of wisdom. With the wide use of calculators and computers, for example, the calculation ability is indeed impaired. Housewives have to carry a calculator to the market in order to solve simple math problems. Nevertheless, with computers, we achieve some goals never imagined. Professors in the University of California, Berkeley, found a supernova with the assistance of a computer strong in data analysis. Without high-speed computers, we have to spend day and night digging information from massive amount of data, leaving no time to construct models or consider other problems in methodology.


Moreover, technology provides human with strong technological support in solving complex and creative problems, which greatly promotes thinking as well as innovative abilities. Only when we observe the stars and caricature the distance between them with the assistance of telescope and other measure instruments, can we find out the rules of the cosmos. Without microscope, we are not capable to perceive cells, let alone to study their styles, constitution and functions. Technology extends human's perception and assists us to discover interesting things, drawing new objectives into our study field and urging us to develop our thinking patterns and invent advanced technologies. Furthermore, since we want to avoid the vapid and simple problems, we will contrive to invent machines and robots to replace us. In the process of invention, our innovative and problem-solving abilities are strengthened.


In sum, while the increasing reliance on technology indeed lead to deterioration in human's ability to solve simple and rigid problems, development of technology extends human's perception and offering technological supports which hence strengthen our innovative and thinking capabilities.

竹林中人

感觉很不错啊

melodyskiing

谢谢哈！
ls之前指正我另一篇文章说犯了general的大忌，这篇是不是比较specific了？