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In the reading passage, the author claims that the method of "let it burn" has caused many damages to the forest and the local econonic condition. And the author does not think the "let it burn" policy is a good policy. In the opposite, the Professor in the lecture states that the "let it burn" policy is a good one, because it benefits the ecomonic and [片面，索性去掉把]the park.
To begin with, the professor points out that after the forest fires, the scorched land has covered by new plants,and the plants have turned out to be more diversity. For example small trees have the oppotunity to grow [信息错啦，文中是说trees被烧掉后，很多本来不会生长的植物现在有机会生长啦，然后有俩例子，都要写出来~~]in the park. However, the author believes that the fires cause large damage to the parks tress and other vegetation. Now the park has become a davastated wasteland. 【只要指出reading中的point就可以，不用reading中的细节】
Secondly, the lecture claims that the wildlife in the park has recovered. Even more, there are new species of animal live in the park becasuse the new opportuniy that created by the forest fire. And these new animals create new good chain for large animals.[文中是是说一些small plants给小动物提供了栖息地，让小动物继续生存，它们能活了，那一些predators自然也能活了，这就形成了一个strong food chain，这样的话就能反驳reading中动物会逃离park。] However, in the reading passage, the author believed that it is impossible for the animals to survive in the park anymore.
Finally, the author thinks that the fires compromised the value of park, which will have a nagative impact on the local tourism industry. In the opposite, the lecture casts doubt on this saying, and the professor points out that after the fire, the tourists come back, and they keep to come to the park every year.【细节太少了，为什么fire不会影响经济，要详细解释。】


【总的来说，结构是清晰的，但是有几点注意下：
  Tips： 1.这篇文章的时态应该是过去时
            2.lecture中的细节不够具体，reading中的细节没必要提
            3.每一段都表明reading与lecture相对立是好的，但是最好能直接指出他们俩的关系，不要只阐述他们各自怎么说的
                建议楼主看一下TPO综合解析  里面有说怎么打破reading中逻辑链的解释，还有怎么做笔记，我觉得对我影响蛮大的。那是个好东西啊~~ 哈哈
                       一起加油~~~    有问题可以来找我讨论喔~~                      】