求好心人改下作文 issue 140 马上要考了！！！！！

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额，刚才没看到发作文的规定，特定重新发一遍，希望好心人提点建议， 马上要考了！！！！
题目 issue 140  比较高频的那个
用时：30min  
提纲： 按照作文5.5的分析方法
先提正： 要求学生多学习一些课外的课程是有好处的，比如能拓宽学生的知识面，学到更多的技能，提高自己在社会上的竞争力。
再提反： 但是我们应该同时注意一些问题，比如是否每个学校都有开设其他领域课程的能力，比如一些专科学校，可能很难提供丰富的课外课程。
               另外，过多的学习其他课程会让学生忽略了自己本专业的东西，最终导致自己虽然学的广，但不深，become a dilettante。
合：   我们应该鼓励学生去多学习一些课程，但同时应该提醒他们要把自己的专业课放在首位，要有一门专长，同时广泛涉猎。

正文：
Issue 140 :
Some people believe that universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study. Others belive that universities should not force students to take any courses other than those that will help prepare them for jobs in their chosen field.

According the statement, the author maintains that some people believe that colleges should require their students to take a variety of courses outside their own field, and the rest group of people hold the position that apart from the courses about their jobs, universities should not compel students to take any other courses. In my point of view, our students should focus on our core curriculum and also take some other fields of courses to broaden their horizon.

As a threshold matter, the author's claim does have some merited advantages, listed as following. The first benefit by doing so is that some students' major are inter-discipline one, such as the biochemistry, which involves both the biology and chemistry. So they have to study both fields of courses. If they just focus on the chemistry or biology ignoring another subject, no success will come with them. The second advantages is that by studying variety of different courses, students will definitely broaden their horizon, expand their spectrum of knowledge, all these are benefit for their future career development. The last merit I want to mention is that by learning variety of courses, we will have a better understanding of our society and world, regarding how it works, especially studying some philosophy and literature courses.

However, there are some aspects should be taken into consideration before we fully support our students to study variety courses, along with problems, which might outweigh the benefits. The first caution is that universities had better to suggest and advise our students to select the outside courses instead of compelling and force, because some students do not interest in other fields at all, even resist to learn other fields' courses, so compelling may cause counterproductive effect. Another problem is that students should not focus too much on other fields of courses, the reason is that too many irrelevant courses may distract their attention and energy which should put on their major core courses at first.

As our society quickly advanced technology and development,. Only the well rounded people may pose the advantage position. If we want to excel out, taking a variety of courses is necessary. Meanwhile we should always remind our students that if they just dabbling the hodge-podge courses we learn without focus on any one, we will become a dilettante at end, lacking enough specialized professional knowledge and skills to resolve the problem and to offer some valuable suggestions. On the other hand, if we unduly put our attention on our own major about our jobs, not to learn other fields of courses, we may lose the core competitiveness in the present advanced develop society.

In the final analysis, one student should pursue a balanced education experience, that is to say, taking a variety of outside areas courses as well as focusing on their own major also necessary, striving to excel in a single area at best.

竹林中人

are inter-discipline one？？
resist to learn ？
some students do not interest in other fields at all，interest的主宾反了
As our society quickly advanced technology and development,as作为连词，只能连接句子，这里也许用with比较好。

逝去的樱花

谢谢斑竹， as 那个确实是一个大错误， 下次注意了
然后 resist to learn 好像表达的很chinglish， 要注意