Argument 3 滑板 处女作 求狠拍

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提纲：

1. 垃圾和破坏的增加是玩滑板引起的吗？

2.即使是由玩滑板引起的，是滑板运动导致经济衰退的吗？

3. 即使前两者都对，禁止滑板就一定能使经济繁荣吗？

跪求各位大神狠拍！！！还有，麻烦大神们指点下instruction 中“Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.”这点我有没有阐述到位，该怎么改进？

3. The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.

"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboardusers in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here,we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether there commendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In this letter, the speaker recommends that skateboarding in Central Plaza should be prohibited. Albeit it may appears plausible at a cursory glance, an in-depth scrutiny reveals that it suffers from several flaws and more questions should be answered with caution.


First off, one question that needs to be answered is does the increase in litter and vandalism results from skateboarding? As no evidence is presented, it is likely that many local residents and tourists do not take care of the environment and facilities rather than skateboarders. It is also likely that the management staffs of Central Plaza do not clean the ground and maintain the facilities as frequently as before, making it as if the amount of litters and vandalism has increases. In this case, it would be presumptuous to blame the skateboarders for the pollution and vandalism.
Moreover, even assuming that increase in litter and vandalism is attributable to skateboarding, another question remains: whether the popularity of skateboarding in Central Plaza should be responsible for the decline in the number of shoppers? It is entirely possible that the economy of this city encountered formidable doldrums and therefore people cannot afford the expensive commodities no matter how luring the Central Plaza is. In addition,since no information about the stores are provided, chances are that commodities in these stores are not fashionable enough as before, making it less attractive and charming for consumers. In this light, each of these two scenarios, if true, would serve to undermine the conclusion that the decrease of number of shoppers results from the popularity of skateboarding.

Finally, even conceding that the forging questions could be provides with evidence, we cannot help wondering that will the business in Central Plaza could retrieve its prosperous condition if skateboarding is banned there. It is questionable. Considering the skateboarding activity in Central Plaza is annoying, many consumers might turn to other commercial districts for shopping. In such case, it is entirely possible that people are so used to shopping in new districts that they refuse to go to the Central Plaza again even though the skateboarding activity is prohibited. Therefore, only when such possibility has been considered and ruled out can the author contends that the business will be as prosperous as before when skateboarding is banned.

In retrospect, it would be precipice to come to the recommendation with some important questions unclear. To bolster the recommendation, the speaker ought to deal with these questions mentioned above, such as what are the main factors leading to the business recession in Central Plaza, and will it retrieve its prosperous if the measure is taken. Only by grasping the main questions of the argument could the author put forward a cogent and persuasive recommendation.

普渡哥

你要做的事情，就是怎么帮助the arguer 来正确地引导到他的结论，而不是否定他的结论。你要做的就是指出他的逻辑不足，怎么办就能够更正确地推到arguer的结论。作者学会好好题干是很好的，我们很多学生不看好题干就写，很难超过3分。

shiwen5006

豁然开朗，非常感谢！

你要做的事情，就是怎么帮助the arguer 来正确地引导到他的结论，而不是否定他的结论。你要做的就是指出他的逻辑不足，怎么办就能够更正确地推到arguer的结论。作者学会好好题干是很好的，我们很多学生不看好题干就写，很难超过3分。

-- by 会员 普渡哥 (2012/6/17 12:17:20)

普渡哥

加油加油！！！要拿4+，还是要花点心思的。

shiwen5006

有普度哥帮助，我会努力的

加油加油！！！要拿4+，还是要花点心思的。

-- by 会员 普渡哥 (2012/6/18 11:51:45)