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liulu007

推荐写作大本营：http://forum.chasedream.com/TOEFL_Writing/thread-661450-1-1.html

改正后的文章会贴在1#哦~~~
题目1：It is more important to reward students for their efforts than for their achievements.
文章1：Some people in society suppose that rewarding students is more vital for their efforts than for their achievements. I have a considerable agree. There are several reasons for this: It encourages the enthusiasm on attending. It helps students to enrich their experience. It avoids the unequal competition between students .

Firstly, awarding students' efforts are more important because they stimulate the interests of attending. If you only attention whether students success eventually, they will lose their interests in persisting achievements. For instance, we all know that Bill Gates doesn't finish his graduate,but he becomes a famous businessman. He get successful because of processing in efforts rather than because of focusing on achievements.

Moreover, more attentions enrich their experience no matter what the result is. Only focusing on the results lead to negative emotions if they get failure finally and try their best. On the contrary, pay attention to their efforts will appeal their zeal and attend as most as possible. In this processing, the students will acquire what they really need.

Last but not least, it avoids the unfair competition between students. For instance, I have a classmate. He is a diligent student but always fail the exams. Their parents always blame him for his scores even though he works hard on studying. He couldn't bear the pressure so he cheat on the final exam. As a result, he was expulsed the school.

In summary, it is emphasized the fact that we reward students for their efforts in order to encouraging their interests, enriching their experiences and avoiding unequal competition. For these reasons, I agree the statement that it is important to reward students for their efforts.

题目2：
Teachers should retain every five years to avoid being the times.
文章2：
Nowadays, we all live in a diversified society. Everything changes in rapid succession. So does the education. Apparently, in my opinion, teachers need to enrich themselves every 5 years for avoiding obsolete. The foundational reasons I give for supporting my ideas are from students and teachers. I will explain more details later.



Firstly, who will be benefit from changing the education? Exactly, the answer is the students. The students available the new acknowledge and thus use them into practice. Moreover, they use their innovations to develop our country. Why a great deal of the scientists research and exploit the difference fields of acknowledge? Why there are so many teachers quit job to go to study? Why more and more students have a higher requests for their teachers? The most important reason is the education can not satisfy with the genetic public now. For example, students prefer to a teacher not only knowledgeable but also humorous now. So the simplified teaching method is not prevalent any more. This means the teacher must change themselves.



Secondly, teachers can benefit from the update education. For instance, they learn new theories and methods. They will change their minds and thus advanced the ideas of the students who they taught. For example, a decade ago we use blackboard to study our courses and teachers use chalk to write what they taught. In contrast, we use computer frequently and the teachers use PPT to record what they want to teach. Even more, less and less students to choose the class whose does not use the computer.



In summary, the teachers need to update their education. It is benefit for students and teachers even our countries.It can process the development of our countries and advance the minds of students and teachers. Indeed, the public include students and teachers will satisfy with their requirements. For these reasons, I agree with a teacher engage in advanced studies.


题目3：
In some countries, teennagers have jobs while they still students. Do you think this is a good idea?
文章3：

liulu007

没有参加写作小分队的原因是因为觉得自己的水平好洼，给人家改不出什么，所以，自己就找题目练习啦！先把手边的这些简单的题目练完，再开始跟着小分队的作业来练~~~~
欢迎大家狠狠拍砖~~~~
这个楼是改正楼~~~~改正后的文章会贴在这层哦~~~~

改正文章1：(支持）

Some people in society suppose that rewarding students is more vital for their endeavors than for their achievements. I have a considerable degree. There are several reasons for this: The results cannot measure a student's effort very well.  Concentrating on endeavours can help students fulfill their potential and  evade unfair competition among students.

Firstly, we all know the achievements are not equal our efforts. We cannot judge whether the capability of a student has only through the scores in the exams.  For instance, though Bill Gates failed to study in Harvard University , he insists on his endeavors and eventually become a remarkable businessman. Would we say Bill Gates is a loser just because he did not have a diploma ?

Secondly, only focusing on results renders students frustrated and thus lose the capacity which can fulfill their potential. On the contrary, when we give priority to the endeavors, which can appeal their zeal and participate as much as possible. In this processing, students will know what they exactly need.

Meanwhile, unfair competition will be evaded among students. Currently,  Teachers and parents tend to overly focus on student's results instead of effects, which exerts a misleading impact on student's value. Take my classmate for example. He could not bear pressure so he cheat on the final exam although he was a diligent student. As a result, he was expelled from the school.

In summary, it is emphasized the fact that we reward students for their efforts in order to measure the criterion, fulfill the potential and evade unfair competitions. For these reason, i disagree with the idea that students should be rewarded for achievemets over efforts. The current systerm, whereby students are assessed according to their efforts, is far better.

小总结一下下：总的来说，题目读的不是很明白，导致后面的原因写的有点儿偏。词汇和句型还是大问题。要多看多背啊。不能偷懒。上班累也不是借口。

晨依Jacqueline

小璐加油！

teddybearj4

Lulu好棒！调整得好快！我今天才缓过神来！……学习一下！之前很少在T区！

liulu007

熊熊，我倒是觉得轻松不少，出成绩的时候也预料到自己结果啦。复习后期我的状态一点儿也不好。无数次和DB说不想去考了，说自己能力没到还要去逼自己好痛苦。DB说我逼自己进步没错，但是方法错了，他感觉后期我整个人就是慌了的状态。真的是他说的那样。因为那时候我都不敢看大家写给我鼓励的话，觉得愧对大家的期望。这次吸取教训总结备考G时的弯路，打算一步步提升能力先了。等杀回去的时候一定会变强大。
熊熊也要先准备T了米？要是就好啦，我又多了一个伴儿。：）

Lulu好棒！调整得好快！我今天才缓过神来！……学习一下！之前很少在T区！

-- by 会员 teddybearj4 (2012/6/1 10:26:31)

铁板神猴

顶一下lulu~！

teddybearj4

是的呀！跟小璐一起加油！！！我们要坚信，等我们回归的时候一定无比强大！

熊熊，我倒是觉得轻松不少，出成绩的时候也预料到自己结果啦。复习后期我的状态一点儿也不好。无数次和DB说不想去考了，说自己能力没到还要去逼自己好痛苦。DB说我逼自己进步没错，但是方法错了，他感觉后期我整个人就是慌了的状态。真的是他说的那样。因为那时候我都不敢看大家写给我鼓励的话，觉得愧对大家的期望。这次吸取教训总结备考G时的弯路，打算一步步提升能力先了。等杀回去的时候一定会变强大。
熊熊也要先准备T了米？要是就好啦，我又多了一个伴儿。：）

Lulu好棒！调整得好快！我今天才缓过神来！……学习一下！之前很少在T区！

-- by 会员 teddybearj4 (2012/6/1 10:26:31)

-- by 会员 liulu007 (2012/6/1 10:38:22)

CCcarol

我先来顶一下！！！~ 我都木有勇气开作文贴呢~~~

liulu007

居然没点上引用~555

liulu007

我先来顶一下！！！~ 我都木有勇气开作文贴呢~~~

-- by 会员 CCcarol (2012/6/24 23:02:37)

我也酝酿了好久，这个作文这么点儿字我分了两天才写完~而且还查了字典~觉得写的也不是很严密，这题我感觉就没啥可说的~真是鳖了好久~