TWM116-second edition, 请NN帮忙改一下，谢了

marinezheng

TWM116-people learn in different ways –second version

People learn in different ways. Some people learn by doing things; other people learn by reading about things; others learn by listening to people talk about things. Which of these methods of learning is best for you? Use specific examples to support your choice.

There are a number of ways that people can learn. Some prefer to learn by reading about things, such as reading books, newspapers or magazines. Others may favor listening to people talk about things, either by attending a lecture or by attending some training courses. While there are still other people prefer to learn by practically doing things. When it comes to decide which way is superior to others, I think they are all equally important. My argument for this view goes as follows.

To begin with, learning by reading books or listening to lectures will enable us to gain sufficient theoretical knowledge that provides an important foundation for actually doing things. Without such knowledge, people will have difficulty in getting a good job; in turn, they will have no opportunity to gain knowledge from practical learning. For instance, an accounting firm will recruit its employees who have an accounting major. It is hard to imagine that someone, who have no theoretical knowledge, can be hired by an accounting firm and do his work solely relying on knowledge learnt by practically doing things. If this is the case, instead of spending four years in university, most students will start to work at a very young age.

On the other hand, the purpose of people to learn knowledge is to apply it in a practical way, and actually doing things is just an extension of theoretical learning. Even if people have sufficient theoretical knowledge, they cannot become a competent employee without practice. For example, a student of management accounting cannot become a successful accountant solely by reading books and listening to lectures. He must accumulate his own experience and learn from his own mistakes before becoming a CFO (chief financial officer). Just as it has been said” practice makes perfect”.

From what has been discussed above, we can say that different ways of learning are closely related, and one can not exist without the other. Theoretical learning helps people to know what to do, while practical learning will told them how to do things. A successful person should not only gain knowledge from reading books and listening to lectures, but also have the ability to apply such knowledge in a practical way.

guandream

welcome the second version.

Now I am too tired to concentrate on editing.

I will tommorrow.

guandream

以下是引用marinezheng在2004-10-3 11:26:00的发言：

TWM116-people learn in different ways –second version

People learn in different ways. Some people learn by doing things; other people learn by reading about things; others learn by listening to people talk about things. Which of these methods of learning is best for you? Use specific examples to support your choice.

There are a number of ways that in which people can learn. Some prefer to learn by reading about things, such as reading books, newspapers or magazines. Others may favor listening to people talk about things, either by attending a lecture or by attending some training courses. While there are and  other people still prefer to learn by practically doing things. When it comes to decide which way is superior to others, I think they are all equally important. My argument for this view goes as follows.

your point of view is clear.

To begin with, learning by reading books or listening to lectures will enable us to gain sufficient theoretical knowledge that provides an important foundation for actually doing things.(very good topic sentence) Without such knowledge, people will have difficulty in getting a good job; in turn, they will have no opportunity to gain knowledge from practical learning. For instance, an accounting firm will recruit its employees who have an accounting major. (it is not related to your topic sentence, but can put it in illustrating the relation) It is hard to imagine that someone, who have no theoretical knowledge, can be hired by an accounting firm and do his work solely relying on knowledge learnt by practically doing things. If in this is the case, instead of spending four years in university, most students will start to work at a very young age.

On the other hand, the purpose of people to learn knowledge is to apply it in a practical way, and actually doing things is just an extension of theoretical learning. Even if people have sufficient theoretical knowledge, they cannot become a competent employee without practice. For example, a student of management accounting cannot become a successful accountant solely by reading books and listening to lectures. He must accumulate his own experience and learn from his own mistakes before becoming a CFO (chief financial officer) (,)Just as it has been said” practice makes perfect”.

From what has been discussed above, we can say that different ways of learning are closely related, and one can not exist without the other. Theoretical learning helps people to know what to do, while practical learning will told them how to do things. A successful person should not only gain knowledge from reading books and listening to lectures, but also have the ability to apply learn such knowledge in a practical way.

good conclusion.

marinezheng,

excellent revision, it is a great job, especially the organization and conclusion. and I also like your topic sentence.

a little problem about the word choice. you use 'thing" too many times, and the introduction should practice more.

"practice makes perfect"

guandream

marinezheng

guandream

thank your for your encouragement,

marine