Issue115，求拍

Apriori

115. Government officials should rely on their own judgment rather thanunquestioningly carry out the will of the people whom they serve.

Writea response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree withthe statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. Indeveloping and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which thestatement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerationsshape your position.

Iconcede that the ability to make wise decision is significant for governmentofficials, but will of the mass is also important in determining politicaljudgments.

Firstof all, government officials are usually those who are outstandingindividuals with exceptional wit, foresight and discernment.Being well-trained and professional in politicalfield, they can make sensible decisions based ontheir own judgments. President Franklin D. Roosevelt,for example, successfully saved Americafrom the Great Depression, which largely attributed to his excellent background of knowledge ineconomics and law.

However,before making the final political decisions, political officials should also take into account the will of people, which I considerconsequential for mainly two reasons. First, almost everyone makes mistakes, soit’s always a good idea to listen to the advice and will of others. If thepolitical officials just rely on their own judgments while being bind to the real need of the mass, they will beeventually disfranchised of privileges. A goodexample is Muammar Gaddafi, the former leader ofLibyawho ruled the country as an autocrat for 41years. Neglecting the demand for democracy and brutally suppressing the opposition, his ruling was atlast overthrown .Secondly, in a democratic society, the officials themselves are elected as thewill of the people, so competent politicalofficials should be consistent with their wordsmade in election. In presidential campaign of America, thecandidate cares for the real needs of the people, makes sincere commitments and blueprints. The one who focuses on theconcerns and will of people wins out, and would fulfill the commitments made tothe public during the election.

Allthe things go well when the judgments of political officials are consistentwith the will of the people, but how when there’re some contradictions? While being cognizantof the people will and carrying them out, the political officials should reconcile their own judgments with public wish, as inthe complicated society there exist different interests,each of which should be treated carefully and properly. Suppose that thegovernment wants to promote the health care reform,the officials can’t simply take any method that helps to the universal medical coverage just because most of themass want to. Rather, they need to considerother stakeholders, such as insurance company and doctors, to make sure the reformis widely accepted based on a common sense. Onthe other hand, people are short-sighted sometimes, and they couldn’t realizethe consequence of a political decision in the far future. For example, peopleusually demand a higher level of country economy and personal material life. Being devoted to efforts in developing these fields,government needs to be aware that the environment should be kept underprotection meanwhile. So here comes another coordinationwhich involves the short concern, noticed by most people, and long one that thegovernment should dig out.

Insum, in current society, the basic quality of a good political official is the loyalty to the public will and the ability to makeindividual judgments. But to be an excellent one, the official should be ableto harmonize each side with another when therecome conflicts.

还有不到一个月了，上班的人真心伤不起，快来不及写了泪

ppguo

写得挺好的。可以再加一点：真正的智慧不是专断，而是善于听取和综合各方意见。题目里面给的是两个极端的例子。

Apriori

谢谢斑竹！我想了想，打算在最后加上一句
Anyway, the true wisdom is neither arbitrariness nor blind relying on others, but a sensible integration of other reasonable advices and one’s own judgments.
升华一下，不知道这样可不可以了？

另外忘记附上提纲了~
我的提纲：政治家的个人判断和公众意愿同样重要
1.    政治官员通常是杰出人物，有智慧、有远见和洞察力，是well-trained和professional的
2.    政府官员在做出决策时必须考虑公众意愿。
a)    个人难免不会犯错。如果忽视民众意愿一意孤行，会与人民乃至世界背离 (卡扎菲Muammar Gaddafi)
b)    民主社会，政府官员本身就是公众意愿的代表，一个人被赋予政府职能权利是因为公众认为他能解决他们关心的问题。例：美国大选
3.    政治家不能毫无疑问地执行民众意愿
a)    各方面利益存在冲突，如医改（涉及保险公司、医生和普通民众）
b)    民众是短视的，如环保和经济发展

竹林中人

the ability to make wise decision，看你的第一段，你是把这个和 the will of the people对立起来的，我自己理解吧，觉得ability换成their own judgement好点，因为ability to make wise decision也可以包括听取民众意愿之后做出决定的能力啊。
你的提纲很好。你的语言表达也很不错，呵呵，加油，继续努力！

Apriori

嗯嗯，斑竹说的很有道理，开头的用词确实不好。谢谢斑竹鼓励！

guominhuhu

你好，你的作文已经比较成熟了，各个方面都很不错。我有一些建议：就是第一段说自己不同意的时候，最好把自己的分论点直接在第一段大概阐述一下，因为只看第一段，觉得你的有效信息有点少;句法方面，句式的变换稍微有点少，再加强一下。例子举得不错，继续加油，向4分冲刺

Apriori

请问一下版主，像北美范文那样写开头，稍微充实下就可以了吗？很困惑啊T_T