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gladys_gl

015 Neighbors are the people who live near us. In your opinion, what are the qualities of a good neighbor? Use specific details and examples in your answer.

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In our daily life, the relationship between neighbors is so important that it would affect the spirit and attitude of everybody. Good neighbors could create and maintain good relationship in the neighborhood. What are good characteristics of a popular neighbor? Different people hold diverse opinions due to their respective angles and personal concerns. In my point of view, I would choose the neighbor who is considerate, warm-hearted and respectful. My preference will be substantiated in the following discussion.

   The essential characteristic of a good neighbor is consideration, which would benefit the relationship of neighbors. As we all know, everybody wants to live in a peaceful environment. However, some people always turn up the music loud, no matter at daytime or in evening. When you are trying to finish your paper, how could you concentrate on your study in such a loud noise? If the neighbor is considerate, they will not do such activities as drinking and singing in the backyard at the midnight. Moreover, they would tell their children not to pick the flowers of their neighbors and not to litter on other's drive way.

    Next one of the most important characteristics of a good neighbor is warm heart. They will give you a hand whenever you need help. People always encounter some unpredictable situations that they are unable to deal with. For example, sometimes you may have to work overtime and no adult is at home, good neighbors would glad to help you to take care of your kids. They would provide the children food and play games with kids until you come back. Supposed that your parent get an acute sickness and need some medicine immediately, unfortunately your car is broken. Good neighbors will offer you a ride to the pharmacy, even though it is pouring or snowing outside. Nobody will be unhappy when they have such warm-hearted neighbors.

   Another feature of a good neighbor is respect. They know how to respect each other and not spread a rumor. In our real life, everybody may make some mistakes. However some people like to criticize the person who did the fault. This kind of deed will definitely harm the emotion and destroy the relationship between people. In contrast, a good neighbor would help him or her to correct the mistake and pass the hard time, not just watch and talk around.

   Admittedly, some people may think that other characteristics are indispensable, such as humor and honest. In fact, these merits could improve the relationship and tighten the connection of neighbors to some extent. However, when all the values of those personalities are carefully compared, I think that the above mentioned characteristics, consideration, warm heart and respect, will greatly contribute to the relationship in our neighborhood and make our community more pleasurable.

[此贴子已经被作者于2004-9-15 13:39:18编辑过]

pengstone

以下是引用gladys_gl在2004-9-15 13:39:00的发言：

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   The essential characteristic of a good neighbor is consideration, which would benefit the relationship of neighbors. As we all know, everybody wants to live in a peaceful (quiet or tranquil)environment. However, some people always turn up the music loud(play music loudly), no matter at daytime or in evening. When you are trying to finish your paper, how could you concentrate on your study in such a loud noise? If the neighbor is considerate, they (Neighbors who are considerate)will not do such activities as drinking and singing in the backyard at the midnight. Moreover, they would tell their children not to pick the flowers of their neighbors and not to litter on other's drive way.

    Next one of the most important characteristics of a good neighbor is warm heart. They will give you a hand whenever you need help. People always encounter some unpredictable situations that they are unable to deal with. For example, sometimes you may have to work overtime and no adult is at home, good neighbors would glad to help you to take care of your kids(good neighbors would be glad to take care of your kids while you are not at home for a few days). They would provide the children food (provide sb with sth)and play games with kids until you come back. Supposed (suppose)that your parent get an acute sickness and need some medicine immediately, (中间要有连接词)unfortunately your car is broken. Good neighbors will offer you a ride to the pharmacy, even though it is pouring or snowing outside. Nobody will be unhappy when they have such warm-hearted neighbors.

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有进步。

有两点注意：１、固定搭配，provide sb with sth　俺好像改过不止一次吧

２、豆号两边的如果是两个独立的主谓结构，就需要用连结词。

gladys_gl

ｐｅｎｇｓｔｏｎｅ，多谢你的批改，PROVIDE 一事是偶没有记住，下次不会再错了

另外，假设举例是用“SUPPOSE  THAT...."这样表达吗？

gladys_gl

偶把文章修改了，请NN们再批改一下。谢先。

In our daily life, the relationship between neighbors is so important that it would affect their spirit and mood for studying and working. Good neighbors could create and maintain mild relationship in the neighborhood. When facing the question that what are good characteristics of a popular neighbor, different people hold diverse opinions due to their respective angles and emotional concerns. In my point of view, I am glad to live with the people together who are considerate, warm-hearted and respectful.

   To begin with, the essential characteristic of a good neighbor is consideration, which would greatly benefit the relationship among neighbors. As we all know, everybody wants to live in a quiet and agreeable environment. However, some people always play music loudly, no matter at daytime or in evening. In such noisy circumstance, how could you concentrate on your study and finish your paper on time? This deed would disturb your normal life even affect your relationship. By contrary, considerate neighbors will not do such activities, moreover, they will tell their children not to pick the flowers of their neighbors and not to litter on other's drive way. Therefore, concerning others when you are enjoying life is a basic standard for a harmonious atmosphere in neighborhoods.

    Next one of the most important characteristics of a good neighbor is warm heart. Warm-hearted neighbors will give you a hand whenever you need help. People always encounter some unpredictable situations that they are unable to deal with. For example, good neighbors would glad to take care of your kids while you are not at home for a few days. They would provide the children with food and play games with kids until you come back. Suppose that your parent unfortunately get an acute sickness and need some medicine immediately. Good neighbors would offer you a ride to the pharmacy, even though it is pouring or snowing outside. Nobody will be unhappy when they have such warm-hearted neighbors like their brothers and sisters.

   Another feature of a good neighbor is respect. They know how to respect each other and not spread a rumor. In our real life, everybody may make some mistakes. However some people like to criticize the person who did the fault. This kind of deed will definitely harm their emotion and destroy the relationship between people. In contrast, a good neighbor would help him or her to correct the mistake and pass the hard time, not just watch and talk around.

   Admittedly, some people may think that other characteristics are indispensable, such as humor and honest. In fact, these merits could also improve the relationship and tighten the connection of neighbors to some extent. However, when all the values of those personalities are carefully compared, I think that the three characteristics mentioned above, consideration, warm heart and respect, outweigh any other qualities and greatly contribute to the relationship in our neighborhood and make our community more pleasurable.

[此贴子已经被作者于2004-9-16 14:01:22编辑过]