3.31第一篇限时issue,求拍~~

ergeshine

If we define human interaction as "face-to-face communication", indeed, to an extent it reduces our opportunities for"human interaction", however, from broader point of the view, the technology provides us with a more convenient communicate method and expands our communication circles.


Admittedly, with the development of the technology, people prefer to stay at home focusing on the computer screen rather than  have a visit to their friends. In the teahouse, which used to be a place for communication, now you can see an increasingly more people sitting alone with their laptops, having a on-line working or chatting rather than having a face- face chatting. The advanced technology makes people spend less time staying and having a chat with their friends .In addition, the quality of communication drops with the popularity of the communication tools. When you are having a party with your friends, you can say to your wife"I an working and I am pretty busy, don't bother me" And everywhere is saturated with this situation.People seem to have a lie much more easily with the technology. From this point, the technology has negative impacts on our human interaction.

However, we overlook this aspect: it is these advanced communication tools that make us communicate with people much more easily and conveniently. For instance, you live far from your mother and you miss her very much.But you have a busy work and cannot put down your work to visit her. Then you could choose to have a phone with her or talk with her by QI, MAN , Skill, and so forth. And these only take you 10 minutes. However, suppose we live in the ancient time without these advanced tools, we have no ways to relieve our miss. So though these tools can not provide us with a "face-to-face"opportunity, however, they make our communication much more easily.

In addition, not only the technology makes our life much more convenient, it also broaden our communication circles. With the proliferation of communication websites, such as Myspace, Twitters, Sina and so forth, we could make more friends than before. If we spend one day staying in the park, perhaps none friends we have made when we go home in the evening,, however, if we spend one day on the Internet, , perhaps we could make numerous new friends , who may have the similar hobbies, experience, ideas with us. Moreover, to those introvert people, they may have a difficulty in the "face-to-face" communication, but he or she could have a good interaction with people online. Therfore, our communication circles are broadened by the technology.

Taking all factors into accounts, numerous as the cons that the advanced technology brings about may be, however, by no means should we lose sight of the upsides it has. It is technology that gets our communications more easily, widely,and conveniently. However, it is highly suggested that a well-order and honest communication platform should be established with the supervision of the government.
我知道这作文写的没有一点的技术含量，堪比初中生的语言水平，可是考场上时间那么短，我什么都想不起来 怎么办呀 烦躁期

ppguo

语言简单不见得是不好，只要表达得流畅就好。

人际关系通常用network, connection.

huangwg08

粗粗看一下，楼主的文笔还是可以的，虽然用简单句，但流畅就行。
any way，however那一段you出现太多了，想办法把它改掉，比如改成individual，学术写作里这种词不要出现太多。

山依格紫

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yuandefeiyi

你写的不错了。。。3.5分应该有了。。我现在是连中文都挤不出来。。更是烦躁。。。

竹林中人

indeed, to an extent it ？it指什么？
你有没有想到人们依靠社交网络进行交往，会不会缺少真实感，会不会使人们丧失某些当面交流的能力，比如动作表情礼仪等，我觉得就这个题目而言，你这么写当然没错，但诚如你所言，略显简单，如果按照题目的instruction来写，我觉得你肯定得考虑得到不好的方面，并提出克服的办法，这样你的作文档次就上升了

竹林中人

语言简单没关系，能够写的准确，通情达意就行，适当时候多多揣摩下表达方式的变换和词汇的替代，也许文采会上上去很多