argument8 宿舍修建 求拍

山依格紫

In this argument, the director recommends that Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories to serve the housing needs of their students. To support the claim the director first points out that Buckingham's enrollment is growing and based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Then he also claims that  students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing for the average rent as an apartment in our town has risen in recent years and attractive new dormitories would also make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham. However, I find this recommendation suspicious in several grounds.


One, the director lacks sufficient information about the types of potential students (non-resident students or dormitory students) and the accurate number of students that would choose to live in a dormitory, if any, can be drawn from it. It is entirely possible that most of potential students are local residents, and they would prefer to live in their own home rather than live in a dormitory, therefore, without detailed and accurate information about the potential dormitory students, the director cannot convince me that it is necessary to build numerous new dormitories

Two, even if  non-resident potential students are less, the mere fact that an apartment in our town has risen in recent years is scant evidence that students would not afford off-campus housing. It is quite possible that in recent years there is an inflation, but the government is sparing no effort to curb inflation. Perhaps in future with the control of government, the price would have a decline , hence students would be able to afford the off-campus housing and choose to living outside. And it is also possible that most potential students are from well-off families, and their living allowance is enough to afford off-campus housing. Therefore, without ruling out these possibilities, the recommendation is unpersuasive.

And finally, the director provides no clear evidence that new attractive new dormitories would  be the major factor in attracting students to enroll at Buckingham. Common sense tells us that education quality plays a much more important role when we choose a school. Though equipped with new dormitories, perhaps Buckingham College would have a lower enrollment due to the decline of education quality. Therefore, without showing clearly that attractive new dormitories would be the major factor to attract students, the director's recommendation is also ill-conceived.

Summed up, the recommendation is not on sound reasoning and thus unconvincing as it stands. To bolster it the author must provide clear and persuasive information that non-resident students would only make up a small portion. That students cannot afford the off-campus housing. In addition must prove that attractive new dormitories would play an important role in choosing schools.

竹林中人

内容和结构写的不错，整体上。
语言貌似有很大进步了。