A39 求各种猛拍~

yhfu

39) A recent sales study indicates that consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City restaurants has increased by 30 percent during the past five years. Yet there are no currently operating city restaurants whose specialty is seafood. Moreover, the majority of families in Bay City are two-income families, and a nationwide study has shown that such families eat significantly fewer home-cooked meals than they did a decade ago but at the same time express more concern about healthful eating. Therefore, the new Captain Seafood restaurant that specializes in seafood should be quite popular and profitable.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.




The argument above claims that a Seafoodrestaurant specializing in seafood would be both popular and profitable due tothe states quo in local market. However, close scrutiny of each of theseevidences reveals that none of them is sufficient and effective.
 Theauthor at first provided a sales record which implied that the need for seafooddishes is increasing recently, yet the statistics here is too vague to bepersuasive. Although the 30% increase seems to be significant, it is entirelypossible that the consumption of seafood dishes nevertheless had only one ortwo dishes a month in the whole city, in that case, even 30 percent increasecan be ignored while comparing to other sort of dishes. Besides, even if theincrease in seafood dishes is significant and effective, it cannot ensure thatthe increase will be everlasting.
 Additionally, the fact that there are no restaurants specialized inseafood may intimate an untapped resources here, but it also suggests a lack ofinterest among the residents. Since the author has not adequately responded tothis concern, it is unconvincing to support the conclusion as well.
  Asfor the target market the author aimed at in Bay City, the analysis may also beuntenable. Neither did the author provide specific information concerning theexact perception or number of two-income families in Bay City nor did he or sheconvince me that the nationwide study can typify the two-income families in BayCity. Perhaps local residents there regard home-cooked meals as healthfuleating and they would rather have meals at home instead of dining out,or perhaps the life pace there is so fast that the only thing they demand fordiet is fast and potable, let alone the healthy food.
 Otherwise, even granted that thenationwide study is representative in Bay City, it also fails to justify thatthere is a casual relationship between seafood dishes and healthful eating.Maybe the seafood is cooked in an unhealthy way, which is inacceptable for thetwo-income family.
  Inconclusion, the argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it, theauthor must provide more reasonable evidence that the seafood specializedrestaurant will be welcomed and profitable. We still need to be informed of thedetails in the sales study about seafood dishes consumption. And we also needto know the actual reasons for the lack of seafood specialized restaurantscurrently in Bay City. To better gauge the local market, the eating habits andconsumption habits of the two-income families in Bay City ought to be fully studied.


我的分析：
1、  缺少证据证明过去五年的消费增长情况还会继续持续下去
2、  缺少证据证明海鲜在食物中所占的比例和实际消费状况，可能基数很小也可能人们只是喜欢有海鲜的酱或者汤。
3、  缺少证据证明增长30%是一个有影响力的上升，可能基数很小甚至忽略不计。
4、  即使消费量确实有所增长，缺少证据证明这个消费是本地餐厅消费，可能是供货到其他城市或者本身就是一个海港，也有可能只是一时潮流。
5、  缺少证据证明全国关于双职工家庭的调查情况也适用于B城。
6、  即使调查情况适用于B城双职工家庭，仍缺少证据证明他们不在家吃就会去外面吃海鲜，可能去朋友亲戚家吃，也可能是由于生活节奏变快，更乐意吃一些相对健康的快餐。
7、  缺少证据证明海鲜一定是一种健康食品，可能会由于含盐量过高或者水质污染等出现问题，或者大多菜式选择油炸等不健康烹饪方式。
8、即使海鲜主题餐厅很受欢迎，缺少证据证明其会盈利，可能其原材料加工费等成本较高，而又靠售价低来吸引顾客使得利润空间极小

请各位大神指教~多谢~~~

godacolyte

美丽同学加油啊！不错的，我还开始写呀，慌得一B啊.........

竹林中人

你现在如果能在短时间内做到这么样，A其实差不多了，你需要注意的是你有些段落只有两行，略显少了点，能否充实下，再就是这篇不知道是你粘贴过来的还是自己打上来的，你要注意下格式，单词不要挤到一起了，哦，另外有个单词纠正下，inaccepptable——》unacceptable

yhfu

你现在如果能在短时间内做到这么样，A其实差不多了，你需要注意的是你有些段落只有两行，略显少了点，能否充实下，再就是这篇不知道是你粘贴过来的还是自己打上来的，你要注意下格式，单词不要挤到一起了，哦，另外有个单词纠正下，inaccepptable——》unacceptable

-- by 会员 竹林中人 (2012/3/6 9:48:55)

版主犀利啊~这篇确实是帮同学一起发上来的~这些应该是粘贴时的错误
顺便请教一下版主大大，最近写了几篇argument，但总是感觉速度不够，求提速方法啊~

竹林中人

你现在如果能在短时间内做到这么样，A其实差不多了，你需要注意的是你有些段落只有两行，略显少了点，能否充实下，再就是这篇不知道是你粘贴过来的还是自己打上来的，你要注意下格式，单词不要挤到一起了，哦，另外有个单词纠正下，inaccepptable——》unacceptable

-- by 会员 竹林中人 (2012/3/6 9:48:55)

版主犀利啊~这篇确实是帮同学一起发上来的~这些应该是粘贴时的错误
顺便请教一下版主大大，最近写了几篇argument，但总是感觉速度不够，求提速方法啊~

-- by 会员 yhfu (2012/3/6 18:16:58)

尽快找到一个属于自己的写argument的模式，就是属于自己的模板吧，不要用别人的，另外自己的模板也不是说句式什么的都定死了，句式和连接词多记些，不变的是搭建文章结构，这样任何题目到你面前，只要你能找到反驳的地方，就可以短时间组织下后就可以提笔就写，一气呵成