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[求助]TWE063 狠心献丑, 如果牛牛们头还不晕,望不吝赐教!!

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发表于 2004-8-21 03:33:00 | 只看该作者

[求助]TWE063 狠心献丑, 如果牛牛们头还不晕,望不吝赐教!!


People can learn from many different ways. On my opinion, one of the most important ways is to experience the difficult time. One can get more lessons than being told the experience by others. So the harshness can be our lessons for the future. Why I am saying so is based on the factors followed.


Usually the tough experience can deeply influence one's mind. They will naturally conclude their shortage and insufficiency and try to overcome them. When People get to be older they can remember most of the tough time in their life. Many famous millionnaires were very poor when they were young. The memory of the childhood made them do their work very hard. Because they have a strong feeling that they must to get rid of the poorness. Do you notice a phenomenon that the champion of a competition often was the looser at last time? People are all need to be proved that they can do things better, they won't give up. Nobody wants to be the looser all the time. Nobody wants to stick on the bad situation. People naturally need to go though the puzzledom.


There is also a proverb in our culture to describe such a situation--Where did you fall, where you should get up. The culture of this society encourages people to keep trying to do things what they did not succeed with. Otherwise they will out of the case. That is the other reason that I agree the title statement. People have to learn from what they have felt difficult with and get progress in the further trying.


Another solid argument for the title statement is the fact that the difficulties come along with the people's growing. No pains, no gains. People are always learning from the difficulties they had. When one begins to learn walk, it is difficult to control their balance. When people begins to write use a pencil, it is too hard to write a straight line. When people begin their career after being educated, is that not easy to get along with the co-workers? I cannot say enough about the difficulties in our life. But, finally, is that still a problem for people to walk, to write? People can feel content and happy with their colleagues after a period of time.  


In one word, people can learn a lot of lessons from their difficulties. People are growing with the experience they obtained from their harshness time. Also the society is advancing as well as the people are getting progress.

沙发
 楼主| 发表于 2004-8-21 04:35:00 | 只看该作者

真是不点不明啊, 万分感谢!


这还是我限时做的呢,不是30分钟,而是60分钟!

板凳
 楼主| 发表于 2004-8-21 04:48:00 | 只看该作者
是,是,改了再帖! BUT WAIT,好象还没谁一贴再贴的啊,那太没脸了!pumpkin MM,我拿4分的目标还远吗?(千万别打击我的积极性),不过,唉,该说的一定要说啊!因为对我绝对是良药,况且也不苦口!
地板
 楼主| 发表于 2004-8-21 11:09:00 | 只看该作者

那个评分网站你觉得怎样?评分权威吗?我贴了两篇,觉得偏高.

还有,这写作速度一开始就要限定在30分钟内吗? 那我怎么也写不完哪,今天披露了我写作文的时间,结果招来一顿狠批,你知道是谁批的就对了.批得我颜面顿失, 象这些天都白忙了似的.

5#
发表于 2004-8-26 07:35:00 | 只看该作者
hi!pumpkin! Would you tell me your E-Mail? I have some personally private questions........
6#
发表于 2004-8-27 22:24:00 | 只看该作者
ppmm真是热心肠啊
7#
 楼主| 发表于 2004-8-28 02:32:00 | 只看该作者

话归正题, 献上TWE063改进版, 继续前进!

  eople can learn from many different ways. In my opinion, one of the most important ways is to experience the difficult time. People can get more lessons than being told the experience by others. So the harshness can be our valuable lessons as we face the future challenge. My conclusion is based on the follow analysis.

Usually the tough experience can deeply influence one's mind. People will naturally conclude their shortage and insufficiency and try to overcome them. When people is aged they can remember most of the tough time in their life. Many famous millionnaires were very poor when they were young. The memory of the childhood drive them work hard. Because they have a strong feeling that they must to get rid of the poorness. We can notice a phenomenon that the champion of a competition often was the looser at last time. All the human beings dream to prove their ability, they will never give up. Nobody wants to be the looser all the time. Nobody wants to stick on the bad situation. People naturally need to go though the puzzledom.

  There is also a proverb in our culture to describe such a situation--Where did you fall, where you should get up. The culture of this society encourages people to keep trying to do things what they did not succeed with. Otherwise they will out of the case. That is the other reason that I agree the title statement. People have to learn from what they have felt difficult with and get progress in the further trying.

Another solid argument for the title statement is the fact that the difficulties come along with the people's growing. No pains, no gains. People are always learning from the difficulties they had. When one begins to learn walk, it is difficult to control their balance. When people starts to write use a pencil, it is really hard to write a straight line. When people makes the first step of their career after being educated, is that not easy to get along with the co-workers? I cannot say enough about the difficulties in our life. But, finally, is that still a problem for people to walk, to write? People can feel content and happy with their colleagues after a period of time. In a way, difficulties are the great treasures for human beings.

  In one word, people can obtain much precious lessons from their difficulties. People are growing with the experience they obtained from their harshness time. Also the society is advancing as well as the people are getting progress.

8#
 楼主| 发表于 2004-8-28 02:53:00 | 只看该作者
忘记说了,ppmm是位敬业,可爱的斑竹MM, 帮我们改作文是件费时/伤神,又义务的工作.  考托对大多数人的意义是蛮大的, 让我们珍惜每次修改, 存感激的心经历CD, 存回馈的心以饷后人!
9#
 楼主| 发表于 2004-8-30 22:29:00 | 只看该作者

收到, 这次好象要向6分迈进了(这人脸皮真厚)!

谢谢!

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