og12 103 warps that是否有啰嗦嫌疑？

lordwilliam

103.    Yellow jackets number among the 900 or so species of the world's social wasps, wasps living in a highly cooperative and organized society where thev consist almost entirely of females—the queen and her sterile female workers.

(A)    wasps living in a highly cooperative and organized society where they consist almost entirely of
(B)    wasps that live in a highly cooperative and organized society consisting almost entirely of
(C)    which means they live in a highly cooperative and organized society, almost all
(D)    which means that their society is highly cooperative, organized, and it is almost entirely
(E)    living in a society that is highly cooperative, organized, and it consists of almost all
答案选B.

这个句子按照B的答案结构我理解成：Yellow jackets （主语） number among （谓语）... species （宾语）...， wasps that live in a highly cooperative and organized society consisting almost entirely of females—the queen and her sterile female workers.

问题在于从wasps开始那个分句，wasps that这种表述方式是不是wordy?直接变成wasps live in a highly cooperative and organized society consisting almost ....是不是应该更好？当然我知道GMAT是考最优选项，所以这里只有B最正确。但是我记得好像在什么地方看到过“主语+that+谓语+宾语”的这种格式有被认为啰嗦，所以想在这里理清这个判断是否正确？谢谢！

zoexixi

刚好整理到这题，我的理解是，【wasps that 分句 】是做同位语，LZ去掉了that，live成了谓语，两个句子中间只有comma, 句子run-On了

LZ所说的【但是我记得好像在什么地方看到过“主语+that+谓语+宾语”的这种格式有被认为啰嗦，所以想在这里理清这个判断是否正确？】，我在想是不是说 【主语+that be 结构+谓语+宾语】啰嗦啊

lordwilliam

多谢点拨！