大家帮我看看作文好吗?

漂亮宝贝

以下是引用曾经沧海难为水在2004-7-9 5:20:00的发言：

fariycat 对不起，以为你是小孩，我的语言有些急。我的年龄也不小了，但坚持一天写2篇以上，然后找老外点评，感觉效果甚丰。特附上一篇我最近写的一篇文章，作为互勉。 When it comes to issue as to whether students should evaluate their teachers, people may provide different responses. As far as I am concerned, I agree the statement and I will elaborate my views as follows. First of all, knowing what students said about them, teachers can be encouraged or changed. On the one hand, the teachers, who receive critiques, will improve their teaching content and measure in order to satisfy the need of students. On the other hand, the teachers, who were praised for their excellent job by students, will be inspired to continue to make all efforts to their work. Both of these vividly indicate that it is conducive to competition among teachers who are estimated by students. Another reason for my view is that through this measure, administrators can master the teaching situation of all teachers. For example, at the end of each semester, the teachers in laceType w:st="on">universitylaceType> of laceName w:st="on">TorontolaceName> are evaluated by the questionnaires filled out by their students and in touch with the representatives of their students. In order to avoid prejudice of adolescent attitude, administrators of U of T review evaluations repeatedly and reach the end result. Using this result, they put forward some constructive suggestions such as effectiveness or inadequacy of teaching to each teacher. Obviously, through this method, administrators of school can regulate teachers effectively. It should be admitted that this practice can bring some disadvantages such as waste some student’s time. However, considering its overwhelming advantages, these side effects can be simply ignored. Moreover, through such evaluation to teachers, students can better understand toilsome work of their teachers and learn to take responsibility for others. They will do best in class in order to get good reputation. Apparently, the evaluation practice is beneficial to personal development of students. In a final analysis, based on what I presented above, evaluating teachers by students can bring a lot of advantages. Therefore, we should applaud this practice. (323) July 5, 2004

请教一下：第一个原因是最主要的原因，所占的篇幅一定要比其他原因多吗？你这篇文章中好像第二个原因论述的更多一些。

chasedream111

我的作文也很差，不知道怎么提高的说。

snow_mountain

捷径我就不知道了. 我几年前考T的时候因为不把作文放在心上, 考前一天看了一篇范文, 就上场了. 结果4.0. 5555555555

现在每天遵循我写我写, 写写写. 一天2-3篇.