AA找错误的思路这样可以吗

totalgloria

依旧觉得自己的AA找错思路有点偏激，找不对路，很惆怅 5555 想请大家帮我分析下
小女的第二篇AA， 写的题目如下
“On average, middle-aged consumers devote 39 percent of their retail expenditure to department store products and services, while for younger consumers the average is only 25 percent. Since the number of middle-aged people will increase dramatically within the next decade, department stores can expect retail sales to increase significantly during that period. Furthermore, to take advantage of the trend, these stores should begin to replace some of those products intended to attract the younger consumer with products intended to attract the middle-aged consumer.”

我找到一个错误，就是我认为products intended to attract consumers不一定真的能attract consumers to buy~
看了范文和孙远提纲，里面都没有提到这个错误~ 这个错误值不值得写出来呢？
请教各位大侠帮忙看看~  谢谢啦~

totalgloria

另外 北美范文里的文章都好短啊，而且我觉得有的错误解释得也很牵强~
大家觉得呢？那个有很大参考价值么~还有没有什么更好的资料？

wynyy2000

为什么这些products不能attract consumers 我觉得言之有理就行，比如说in the future, the taste of middle-age shoppers changed, the former products are not appealing as before， 这个可以归结到过去不等于现在，现在不等于未来中去，我个人认为要先把大的logical fallacy 找出来，小点在各段以两三句话概括就够了

totalgloria

恩恩 谢谢哦  很受用