帮我看看作文，可以打几分啊

wuzhongyu

文章如下：大家多多指教，指出其中的不足

      This problem is a much debated issue in that it affects many teachers and students in their campus life.Some people prefer to asking students to evaluate their teachers,while others, in contrast ,are object to this idea. But if I am concerned,I will definitely support to ask student to evaluate their teachers. The reasons are given below.

    Firstly,in my point of view, the evaluation to teachers is a good way to supervise the education quality in school.As we all know, teaching is a kind of interaction.The two sides all join it with full of attention and motivotion,so the action just reach its goal that make students acquired with knowledge and help teachers realize their career.whether the students acknowledge what teachers talk about in the lecture is a determinated factor to assure the education quality.we can flexibly change the schedules or the teachers to meet the requirrement from students in time, through evaluate, at the same time ,make a proper plan for the most student.It could help two sides.

       Secondly, the evaluation will inspire every student and encourage them to pay more attention to their courses.We can promte the motivation of students through the evaluation and help them realize themseves properly.When students view themselves as a host in eduaction.The atomosphere in schools will have a great change.The progress of education quality is bound to happen.

    Finally,from what has been discussed above,I will arrive at a conclusion that requiring student to evaluate teachers is a good opportunity to enchance education efficiency and quality.If such evaluations are applied in good ways, the results for everyone are doomed to reach.

enjoylife517

好像还是有点欠缺吧，估计4分。有个网站能评分的，可以去看看。

https://www.dxrgroup.com/cgi-bin/DxR_TOEFL/score_guide.pl?dxr401=5208;dxr410=7025

还有看看机考区的贴，关于作文的，会有帮助。

sandyzhu1111

     This problem is a much debated issue in that it affects many teachers and students in their campus life.Some people prefer to asking students to evaluate their teachers,while others, in contrast ,are object to this idea. But if I am concerned,I will definitely support to ask student to evaluate their teachers. The reasons are given below.

    Firstly,in my point of view, the evaluation to teachers is a good way to supervise the education quality in school.As we all know, teaching is a kind of interaction.The two sides all join it with full of attention and motivotion,so the action just reach its goal that make students acquired with knowledge and help teachers realize their career.whether the students acknowledge what teachers talk about in the lecture is a determinated factor to assure the education quality.we can flexibly change the schedules or the teachers to meet the requirrement from students in time, through evaluate, at the same time ,make a proper plan for the most student.It could help two sides.

       Secondly, the evaluation will inspire every student and encourage them to pay more attention to their courses.We can promte the motivation of students through the evaluation and help them realize themseves properly.When students view themselves as a host in eduaction.The atomosphere in schools will have a great change.The progress of education quality is bound to happen.

    Finally,from what has been discussed above,I will arrive at a conclusion that requiring student to evaluate teachers is a good opportunity to enchance education efficiency and quality.If such evaluations are applied in good ways, the results for everyone are doomed to reach.你好,我觉得你的作文没结尾,你首先FIRSTLY. SECONDLY.FINALLY应该是最后一个论点,,而且还有一点小语发错误,你可以看看范文,这是我的一点小意见,THEMSELVES,STUDENT 不可以单独存在,

jadeliuyi

AGREE, THERE IS NO CONCLUSION.

THE STRUCTURE IS NOT SO CLEAR, N' THE WAY U WRITE IS NOT SKILLED.

MAYBE 5 OR 4

wuzhongyu

谢谢各位，我已经于昨天从战场上下来了，作文的感觉和各位意见相似。。。。唉。。听天由命了。。。。