TPOIC 1
eople attend college or university for many different reasons. Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answers.
Nowadays the majority of the
students/high school graduates choose to attend college or university
after graduating from high school/delete. There are numerous reasons
why do people attend college/behind their decision,
undoubtedly/among them are, making a further study/receiving advanced education ,
broadening horizons and preparing for the job-hunting
(你不觉得这一点有些牵强吗？难道不上道学就不能准备找工作吗，建议你改成shooting for a lucrative job) should be listed/delete .
The essential benefit of attending college is that one can acquire knowledge in a more systematic way. As we all know,
college education is a specialized education/most universities consist of distinct schools where students can select majors which they are interested in
flexibly/delete.
Therefore/During the four years in college, they can concentrate on developing and enhancing their specialties. As a result, college
students/graduates generally have
theoretic advantages/an edge in academics than
that who does/those who chose not
+to attend college.
Additionally,
colleges have various club activities which/a selection of campus activities can broaden
your/students' horizons. For example, student union
, which/delete is full of competition. In
this/student union, students
have to get more involved/can practice their social and organizational skills through a range of activities,
like/such as election campaigns,
planning/delete Christmas party, or
organizing lectures/seminars sometimes. Our capability for communication, organization and management
are developed/develops enormously through
the/delete active participation. Also,
every/many clubs
is full of/open to people
from the/delete different places, and then
you/students can make friend with everyone
+else.
Using this method/By doing this, not only can
you/one learn
different customs in different districts/the cultures of different countries without traveling, but also
you canlearn the
quite/delete distinct ways of thinking.
(这段话语言问题暂且不说，你的切入点有偏差，你的理由是： 因为公司招人时偏好高GPA和专业实践经验多的学生， 所以要去大学读书。那我我可以反问，难道不读大学就没有高GPA和专业经验？建议你改成大学时进入高端企业的敲门砖，之后再花时间比较高中毕业和大学毕业的就业面区别。我觉得这样的论述更有效)Finally, in addition to acquiring more knowledge and experiences, college experience offers access to
jobs with a clear path（irrelevant）. For example, excellent GPA and abundant practical experiences can make your resume more attractive. Employers are willing to pay a premium for highly qualified applicants. Besides, a college degree could afford opportunities for
advancement/career development and graduate study.
In conclusion, attending college is an indispensable experience
throughout life/for people in the modern era(这句话与题目无关，只是问你上大学的原因，没问你为什么一定要去大学). Not only can it enrich
+esour/people's knowledge and horizons, but also
it can point out the way forward(这句话太抽象).
-- by 会员 200704044127 (2010/10/20 0:01:41)
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