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odie117

What do you consider to be the most important room in a house? Why is this room more important to you than any other room? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.


                 No doubt, I think the living room is the most important room in a house. I am aware of that each room enjoys its main use, but after carefully consideration, I think that the use of a living room seems to outweigh than else rooms'. Here I'd like to provide some instances supporting my view.


                 Certainly, no other reasons in my decision are more crucial than the one as follows. As we know, the living room has gradually became the main active place for the family. Today many family use their living rooms as dinning rooms, because the size of a family becomes smaller than before, and people tend to watch TV when having meals. Besides, living room usually serves as a communication place. Whenever there's a family meeting, parents often talk to their children in living room.


             Another reason why I advocate that living room has now become the most significant place in family life is that living room is the main place to meet guess. As for Chinese, we consider good deport and courtesy very indispensable. A living room can provide a right space.


             As a matter of fact, some other rooms in a house also play an important role. Take bedroom for example, it offers the family member a place to rest at night. In additional, we can only have personal private here. But the function of communication among family members in our modern society is what I want to emphasize. That's why I still hold the view that living room is the most important.


             To put all in a nutshell, we don't deny that functions other different rooms bring to us, but considering the convenience and the communication in a family, I think a living room is the mostly needed.

odie117

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