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ocean368

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Whether to follow the customs of a new country or to keep their own customs?

The issue of whether people should change their customs when moving to another country is a controversial one. Faced with this question, people might give different answers due to respective experiences and standpoints. Some people might argue that we should respect local culture and follow the new customs. Others, on the contrary, would like to choose to keep their own customs. As far as I am concerned, of the two points, I advocate that the former should be an advisable choice. My reasons are listed as follows.

For one thing, as we may all aware, travelling to another country is a precious life experience not only because people would see beautiful scenery but also because they would have chance to experience a totally different culture. Just imagine you are citizen of this country, and act in the way as local people do, you could act in a way different with that in your country, maybe this will also help you to understand more about a new culture, and even the way people think in this new country.

What's more, when moving to a country, people should at least show some respect to the country's culture. At this means, adopting this country's customs is of great importance and will make residents happy and comfortable. For example, whenever I see a foreigner using chopsticks in the restaurant, I feel very glad and emotionally close with him.

Admittedly, keeping your own customs might make life relatively easier by not trying hard to learn kinds of new things. It might also be a way to demonstrate your own customs to people in this country. However, if all the factors are contemplated, it is obvious that the advantages of adopting new customs carry more weight than those of just keeping people's own customs.

In sum, I would like to say that following the customs of a new country is a sagacious choice for several reasons, among them learning more knowledge about a new country, and showing respect to the people and culture of a new country. Thus, whenever I visit a country I would like to follow its customs.

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[此贴子已经被作者于2008-10-9 2:26:52编辑过]

ocean368

自己顶一下。NN快快来帮忙啊！

miraclelily

你想要怎么改呢？

ocean368

看看有什么要改进的地方，好抓紧时间弥补的说...

请LS帮忙！

greatel

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Whether to follow the customs of a new country or to keep their own customs?
The issue of whether people should change their customs when moving to another country is a controversial one. Faced with [Facing to] this question, people might give different answers due to respective experiences and standpoints. Some people might argue that we should respect local culture and follow the new customs. Others, on the contrary, would like to choose to keep their own customs. As far as I am concerned, of the two points, I advocate that the former should be an advisable choice. My reasons are listed as follows. [\ I think this beginning model is highly similar to the template of the GRE AW, which is not advocated by the IBT writing.]
For one thing, as we may all aware, travelling to another country is a precious life experience not only because people would see beautiful scenery but also because they would have chance to experience a totally different culture.  Just imagine you are [a ] citizen of this country, and act in the way as local people do, you could act in a way different with that in your country, [.] maybe this will also help you to understand more about a new culture, and even the way people think in this new country. 
What's more, when moving to a country, people should at least show some respect [respects] to the [this] country's culture. At this means, adopting this country's customs is of great importance and will make residents happy and comfortable. For example, whenever I see a foreigner using chopsticks in the restaurant, I feel very glad and emotionally close with [to] him.
Admittedly, keeping your own customs might make life relatively easier by not trying hard to learn kinds of new things. It might also be a way to demonstrate your own customs to people in this country. However, if all the factors are contemplated, it is obvious that the advantages of adopting new customs carry more weight than those of just keeping people's own customs.
In sum, I would like to say that following the customs of a new country is a sagacious choice for several reasons, among them learning more knowledge about a new country, and showing respect to the people and culture of a new country. Thus, whenever I visit a country I would like to follow its customs. [总体上来说写的很不错，风格与GRE AW非常近似，在tofel中，有时候高分作文往往和GRE的风格想去甚远。不过看法不一，多多加油。]

ocean368

看了LS的该评，发现自己的the a an这些冠词的用法确实需要注意，不是不会，但是考试时间紧张很可能出错。

这个模板是根据snowmountain总结的185作文中NN们的评改整理出来的。时间有限不想动了，还是尽量争取把笔误减到最小程度吧！

BTW，请NN帮忙打一下分好么？实在是没谱儿。

[此贴子已经被作者于2008-10-8 22:55:01编辑过]