Thanks for the comments.But can you tell me what preposition should I use? Well actually, I did taught IELTS(the speaking section) since I was a sophomore and had taught more than 500 students before I graduate. So it seems that if I had known you much earlier,I might be a much qualified English teacher? 开始觉得那位批评你英语的人有点尖酸,但你那么不谦虚我实在看不下去了。我认识很多教英语的人自己水平也不怎么样,你那段话写得的确不好,读上去很不流利不地道,语句之间缺乏逻辑。不要又跳出来说你四级六级八级GMAT作文多少分,那种作文都很无聊。在你原文基础上简单改: 原文:I am the a/c manager of VIP customers of HSBC,seems to have the same background with you.I have just got the offer today.well, the whole application is a bit complicated.My suggestion is if you have already got your GMAT,that's OK to be remain in the job.If not,please resign, for it requires so much energy, and you need to make some sacrifice.
改:I am VIP a/c managerof HSBC. Seems we have similar background. I've just got an offer today. Well, the whole application is a bit complicated. My suggestion is that if you've already got your GMAT score, it's OK to remain in the job, if not, please quit, for it requires so much energy, and you need to make some sacrifice.
1 不要这么喜欢用the 2 the same with一般表达the situation is the same with sb. 3 be remain or remain? 词性要分清楚 4 不要又想学得很口语化,不讲拼写,有的地方又一本正经全拼I have got...不伦不类 5 要口语的话用quit比resign更合适,resign常接from,。语感应该提高,了解词的nuance
如果你觉得准备GMAT需要辞掉工作,看来你水平也不怎么样。(我以前在花旗)
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