TWN No.185, 请NN们帮忙改一下

superyou

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185.When you have enough money available, what you will do? To purchase a house or to start your own business?
 
Well, it is a debatable topic, especially now restate price is increasing in China. Most people will prefer a house, since in this way, they could keep the value of their property compared with risk of losing money in business. But I would like to say, if you view the question in another angle, we may arrive at the oppsite.

Admittedly, both choice are some kinds of investment. Based on the restate market status we have now in China, buying a house is not a bad choice finacially. Looking at price index of hourse and CPI every month, we could easily conclude that investing in a hourse is worth doing since price of hourse is keeping increasing day by day and the its percentage is far above monetary inflation. With the hourse, at least in short term, you could keep or even increasing the value of you money spent. But be careful, status of  the restate market in USA tells us another truth that price of hours will not keep growing forever and in long term, you may lose money finally.

Finacially speaking, there may be some risk in case you start your own business with the money, but compared with buying a house, advantage of starting own business will weight more.

The essential factor which deserves our attention is starting own business is longer term investment compared with buying a hourse. It is the same for both choice that you have to spend a huge amount of money at one time. But later on, what will each bring to you. With a house, you could find via news on TV or Restate Medium that price of your house is increasing every day. But you will never enjoy the increasment back in term of money unless you sell your house to others. The situation is different with your own business, you could get money back every month or even every day(for sure, the pre-request is that you could survive at the very beginning). With cash return, your investment will give more denefit to improve your finnacial status instead of knowing that value of your property is going up but you can not get any money in return.

And another benefit plays equal importance is starting a new business is not only an investment in your property, but also an chance for yourself to develop by improving business skills, people management & market understanding. We could reach the conclusion that lauching own business will open a door to real business world and exercise to improving yourself.

In conclusion, although the statement will arouse disagreement among the public, it is my personal belief that starting my own business is a better choice than perchasing a house, for long term finacial benefit and person development

xiaomin1115

论述买房方面内容过多，选择从商内容并不是很突出。