请德克版主以及各位牛牛们看看我这种写法是否可行（附作文）

baizuofu

我以前的套路（段落）就是 主体句+原因论证+例子+段落总结

但是水平太有限了，原因论证总不到点子上，而且说明原因会让我想很长时间，并且，说的还是地道的chinglish。背过部分高分作文中写原因的句型，不怎么会改，改完后读起来感觉别扭，全文不通顺。反正就是很崩溃

于是段落套路改为：主体句+例子+另一个例子 

换句话说就是靠写例子来说明，我的例子都是编故事，我哥哥的经历，某个科学家阿(爱迪生), 以及我最近读的一篇报道加专家的一项调查。感觉这个比说理容易多了。于是就已近乎记叙文的形式写了下面一篇文章，读起来比以前的通顺，明白，当然技术含量低了点（结构简单）。我想知道我的这种写法可行么？

题目:27. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Once in a magazine, I came across an essay written by a famous writer saying that people should only do the things that they enjoy doing. While this article represents a very prevailing idea about life, I could hardly agree with it. As far as I am concerned, no one could ever avoid doing things that they do not enjoy from time to time for themselves or the people they love.

In the first place, we all have to face difficult tasks sometimes though they are not that enjoyable because they are good for us in leading to a better future. My brother is a good example who wished to be a scientist concentrating on making the most intelligent robot since he was ten years old. However, as he grown up and finally become a student in artificial intelligence, he realized mathematics, a subject that he is not good at and do not like so much, is an essential tool when learning robotics. To make his dream come true, he took the advice from his supervisor that people should sometimes do things they do not enjoy. A friend of mine also meet the same problem when she planned to learn fashion designing in France but hate learning a new and difficult language. Fortunately, she did not give up and won herself the chance of education in a famous French university by working on the task she never enjoys. While it would be great that we only need to do things we like, it is not the case in reality. And I believe it worth making efforts on those things we like less, when they are important for the future.

Furthermore, in another situation, it will be our choice to do something though we do not like it to help the people we love. For example, my grandma has once go abroad, leaving his pet dog to me and ask me to take care of it. In fact, I do not keep a pet myself because it costs a lot of time to feed them, wash them and taking them out for a walk. Besides, a couple of friends are allergic to dogs and it is no longer convenient for them to visit if I keep the pet at home. However, I did her the favor because this dog is the best friend of hers who kept her away from loneliness since grandpa passed away. Though I do not enjoy watching it, I was happy to make grandma relieved.

Admittedly, for a lot of cases, interest is the crucial reason why we do something. If a child is fond of painting, he should be given the chance of learning how to paint. Or if mathematics is a girl’s natural love, she should do it without hesitating. Yet, things we do not find interesting at first would be very important either for ourselves or for our friends and family. Therefore, sometimes people cannot do everything only depends on whether they enjoy it.

 

 

In conclusion, from what has been discussed above, I am fully convinced that we should doing things we do not want to when these things is benefit to others or ourselves. 

 

yidy

恩，我不是牛，也不是任何形式的牲口。所以，
          我就是这样练的。

首先我觉得牛么，总是能写出很高级看起来就很有内涵的词汇，又很有深度，而且总是能举出很丰富很到位的例子，论证的力度比编故事要强（至少在中国人的观点看来）。

而我，第一词汇不足，第二辩证思维不好，第三没有强大的例子为我撑腰，而应用词汇量的提高，辩证思维的训练，有力例子的积累实在不是一朝一夕的事情。所以，我从开始练得时候就采取了写故事的方式。

可是由于受到了词汇量和语法的制约，写出来的感觉和LZ差不多。但依然，我打算坚持我的这种方式，至少它对我来说是安全和保险的。

与LZ同加油。