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这样的ISSUE可以得几分啊?

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楼主
发表于 2008-1-6 11:21:00 | 只看该作者

这样的ISSUE可以得几分啊?

40.“With the increasing emphasis on a global economy and international cooperation, people need to understand that their role as citizens of the world is more important than their role as citizens of a particular country.”
  The issue claims that people nowadays should perform the role of as citizens of the world more than one nation. To some extent, I generally agree with the author's assertion as the role of the world becomes increasingly important in the modern society. However, the author unnecessarily extends the broad assertion to an irreversible extrem while overlooks the importance to play the role as a nation citizen that may affect the role as a world citizen relatively. As far as I concerned, my positions are based on a deep and fundamental analysis as discussed below.
   On the one hand, I am quite in favor of the author's idea that people's role as citizens of the world is becoming more and more important currently. We can apparently receive the merits primarily in many cases in which the implicit rationale behind it accords with common sense and our experience in daily life. There arised a number of problems all through the world, it is necessary for citizend to take into account the issues in the perspectives of a world citizen but not only a nation. For instance, the severe environmental issue, the crisis of mineral resources and so forth. Therefore, people should take actions and responsible for all the world but not merely for one nation.
  Furthermore, if people only consider themselves as a nation citizens, probably they would only care about their interest but regardless of others, shifting the burden and threating from their own nation to another, thus leading to a series of circularly serious consequences. Given by the example, some developed countries import a large quantities of wood from developing countries in order to solve their own problems temporarily. Nevertheless, in the long run, no nation can survive alone without any interdependent, short-sight and narrow mind will only result in the more severe consequences.
  On the other hand, it does not mean that people have to discard or weaken their role as citizens of one nation. Without the awareness of being citizens of a particular country, people will find no roots to behave on the stage of the world. The two roles are not incompatible but mutually benefit in the most time. As a citizen, while preserving the traditional culture also contributes positive efforts to the diversity of the world culture. Obviously, when a person make donnations to the country's public service and charities, which also motives and arise him/her to pay attention to the international scope.
  To sum up, issue of being two roles is complex one requiring subjective judgement. So different are the personal experiences and emotional concerns among people with diverse culture that thousand individuals might hold thousand opinions. According to my position, I consider that the two roles, national and international, are not mutually exclusive alternative, they can be properly combined to serve each other.
 
沙发
发表于 2008-1-6 13:20:00 | 只看该作者

说实话,这个题目我也写了,但是看了你的文后,我觉得你写的比我写的好的多.所以我就不浪费大家的时间了.总的感觉LZ的AI比AA写的好,至少内容上面充分的多,而且感觉文笔通畅.

如果非要说缺点呢,我觉得匠味重了点,可能LZ自己总结的内容比较多吧,但是也没必要都堆上去,这样反而让文章生硬而缺少个性.

一家之言,LZ自己参考.

板凳
发表于 2008-1-6 14:30:00 | 只看该作者

我写得文笔比你差远了,但是观点没有你这么空泛,最后得了6分。

注意要有内容,单是辞藻华丽打动不了一个批了上千篇文章的人。

地板
发表于 2008-1-7 07:28:00 | 只看该作者

看完的感觉:读起来喘不过气,句子(太)长,比RC都难,而长句本身并没有替文章增加实质内容。

虽然用了许多转折和连接,但只是句式上的承接而不是内容上的承接。

建议增加些实例,用通俗的短句写就行,这样内容就充实多了。

5#
发表于 2008-1-7 10:43:00 | 只看该作者
4 or 4.5
6#
 楼主| 发表于 2008-1-7 22:05:00 | 只看该作者

谢谢大家,可是我举实列感觉写不过来啊。。。

完了明天就考了。。。JJ都还没看,会不会死的很难看啊。。。

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