急问：essay的修改问题

flyrabbitfei

找了个外国朋友帮我修改了下essay，改完后我一看，太流利了，措词太好了，怕学校看出来修改的痕迹。问问大家，这种情况怎么办呢？不修改的话，有些语句也不通顺，改完了又太通顺，这可怎么办啊？

小土狗

反polish

flyrabbitfei

楼上的意思是把那些自己肯定用不到的词再改成自己熟悉的？

yaoyao99

I would make sure the essays still sound like you, otherwise you'll run into a lot of problems during the interview.  Good luck!

flyrabbitfei

谢谢yaoyao,我觉得大部分的语气还是没有改，内容也完全没有改，就是有些措辞我不可能会用到的，就改回去好了~

hgconnie

同问啊,哈哈....真是dilemma.

我写的就像小学生写的,都怪国内写的那八股文太多

那人家写的真是好哦...

唉...就像我帮我初中表弟改文章,改完立马被老师在班里念...汗啊.

YellowJacket

The school wants to know about YOU, not how good you write.  If they suspect that someone else contributes to the essay, they would start questioning about your honesty - which is very serious in the American society.  That could jeopardize your application.  For example, an applicant who scored 4.0 in GMAT essay writing submitted a 6.0 essay in the application.  You can be assured that the person's application will be ended up in waste basket.  My suggestion is that, you should ask your friend to provide his opinion from a reader's perspective.  Also, use spell checker to proof-read your essay before submitting.  Don't make a serious mistake before it is too late.

flyrabbitfei

Thanks for the suggestion.

flyrabbitfei

8过看前人的成功经验访谈，好多都请老外修改过的哦~

flyrabbitfei

er,如果偶是英语专业的，作文分数也挺高的，再把老外写的修改一遍，应该还好吧......