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superboy2008

011 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should give the same amount of money to their students' sports activities as they give to their university libraries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

 

 

         My view is that universities should give less amount of money to their students' sports activities than they give to their university libraries. As far as I am concerned, university is a place for student to gain their knowledge in specific field rather than a place to develop their body strength.

         In the first place, let us take a general look at the people who go to universities. It really do not take much to discover that people who go to universities are at least above the age of 18, which means they are already fully grown adults and they do not need to develop their body through sports activities. Also if they really want to further their body training, it does not have to be in universities. They can go to the professional training centers or gymnastic centers, and they have a much wider range of sports to choose from.

         In the second place, with the expansion of yearly enrollment, university libraries are becoming more and more insufficient to meet the growing need of students. We often can see that university students get up around 6am, rash to library just for securing seats and wait anxiously just for borrowing books they want to see long ago. The only way to suspend this trend is that universities should invest more money, give more resource to libraries. As we all know that university budget is limited, we should allocate them properly and wisely.

        Additionally, by saying "less amount of money", I mean nothing to ignore the importance of taking part in sport activities while ones have spare time. Admittedly, doing sports is an excellent way for university students to refresh the mind from academic studying and tiring research. But again, the amount of money spent in the sport activities should be no more than that of university library.

        In the conclusion, investing the money to universities libraries is always a sound option, and universities should give the priority to the academic-related area rather than the sports facilities.

milorambaldi

1. either say 'smaller amount of money' or 'less money' but never'less amount of money'
2.'as far as I'm concerned' sounds rude and ignorant here.try something else.
3.bad structure. split it or change it.dont put two 'they' in one sentence.They can
go to the professional training centers or gymnastic centers, and they
have a much wider range of sports to choose from.
3.dont say 'we often can see',rather, put it as 'we can always see students gettin gup around 6 am rushing...'
4.'the only way to solve this problem is for universities to ....'rather than 'suspend this trend' and 'that universities should'
5.'refresh THE mind'？or 'refrshes their mind'

6.'money spent ON sports activities'than that 'on'
7.in conclusion. dont put 'the' in the middle.also 'investing in'

overall its gd work.sorry if i was being picky.couldnt help^^use it as reference though as I'm no expert in GRE

superboy2008

thank you very much