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superboy2008

009    some people prefer to live in a small town, others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

 

 

            As I was born in a big modern city, personally speaking, I prefer to live in a big city rather than a small town. Some might argue that people living in a big city have to face many problems, air pollution, traffic jam, noise, high pressure, just to name a few of them. Admittedly, living in a big city  does bring some negative effects on people's day to day lives, but the bright sides it creates far outweigh the its drawbacks.

            As I was born in a big modern city, personally speaking, I prefer to live in a big city rather than a small town. Some might argue that people living in a big city have to face many problems, air pollution, traffic jam, noise, high pressure, just to name a few of them. Admittedly, living in a big city  does bring some negative effects on people's day to day lives, but the bright sides it creates far outweigh the its drawbacks.

          For one thing, living in a big city offers people there a better education opportunity than those who are not. The education system is much more advanced. From the kindergarten, primary school, middle school, high school then finally to college and university, living in a big city can provide one a systematic all round education that a small town can not offer. The courses that schools in a big city can provide cover a much wider range than that of a school in a small town. Also, the teachers in a big city are usually much more qualified than their counterparts who are living in a small town. Thus, the younger generation who are living in a big city has a better education to receive.

          For another, living in a big city offers people there a better job opportunity as well. Big cities, like Beijing, Shanghai, Shenzhen, are much more developed than small towns. Those big cities, interacting with the west world, exchange the culture and traditions which makes the births of various new industries possible. Thus the new jobs opportunities are created, fostered, and developed. This phenomena, I suppose, rarely happens in a small town. Not only the new jobs should I mention, but the traditional jobs, such as construction work, cleaning work, texture work, selling work, I also should not ignore. The big cities also provide a multitude of opportunities of working positions in the traditional domain.

         Living in a big city usually makes one's life more meaningful and colorful. Theaters, cinemas, sports centers, theme parks, they are all excellent place to spend your spare time, refresh your body and soul from the high stress in the working, and add the essential fun to your fast paced city life.

         In the final analysis, living in a big city is far more suitable and feasible than living in a small town. As a city dweller, I can not even imagine how awkward and tedious it will be if I am living in a small town.

[此贴子已经被作者于2007-11-3 17:04:01编辑过]

alexwithibt

总体感觉还可以. 论诉和例子都不错.

我改了一下第2段.

For one thing, living in a big city offers people there a better education opportunity than those who are not. The education system is much more advanced. From the kindergarten, primary school, middle school, high school then finally to college and university, living in a big city can provide one a systematic all round education that a small town can not offer. The courses that schools in a big city can provide cover a much wider range than that of a school in a small town. Also, the teachers in a big city are usually much more qualified than their counterparts who are living in a small town. Thus, the younger generation who are living in a big city has a better education to receive.

 

(For one thing, big cities have established so advanced resources and education infrastructures, from kindergarten, primary school, middle school, high school to university, that children can obtain better education and definitely represent stronger competition in the future than those in small cities. In big cities, public library with millions kinds of books never fail satisfied children’ curiosity and desire to knowledge. Children in schools not only acquire systematic study by following best teachers, but also may attend any type class of such subjects as piano, painting, or arts off campus. All of above ensure children developing well-round. However, in my country, in small cities and some economic-underdevelopment areas, children, as a primary human power, must aid their family strive for living on economy; hence, they lose education chances. From this viewpoint, I, fairly reasonably, believe that living in big cities is preferable.)