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quanweiwei

Nowadays, music plays a significant role in people’s daily lives. We are able to get in touch with music in varied of aspects. MP3 and MP4 players, laptops, TV and radios invite us to listen to the music at any time if we want. I harbor the idea that music is the key to know about different cultures in the world, relax ourselves after intense work and study and catch the fashion trend.

  First and foremost, different types of music stand for different culture, with different notes and rhythms. The composers create the novel music movements in the changed background. In old times, especially in the countries which have their own national religions, many of the songs and sonatas are composed for religious reasons. For example, Johann Sebastian Bach whose goals to compose are praising the GOD and purifying our souls is the most famous musician in 17^th century. What’s more, in ancient China, the government paid the composers large amount money to make euphonious music for Buddhism. In addition, the understanding of music is helpful for us to know about the music instruments. As a musical fan, now I can play the piano, flute and violin very well.

  Besides, listening to the music is really an efficient and effective medicine for the citizens who live in the stress. As for my own perspective, dealing with the busy work deprives us all of the spare time. However, a portable music player can be easily taken along. When you are in a hurry to catch the bus in the morning, the lively songs give you high spirits to face with the newly days. When you want to have a break in the noon, soft music like blues can ease your tension. After a day of tedious work, you will dance with your friends, with the jazz or rock and roll music circling in the pub. In short, the music is a doze of medicine for curing us mentally press.

  Last but not least, the development of music is a notable symbol in the fashion trend. Hundreds of years ago, people enjoy the folk music in their own regions. Later, the sonata which is more elegant is accepted in common. When coming to the modern society, people ,especially the youth, appreciate the pop music such as jazz , r&b, rock and roll and so on much than before. I believe that the diverse kinds of music stands for our economy development more or less.

  All in all, the music is of vital importance in our lives. Considering the factors from lots of the aspects, religion or economy, hobby or passion, music is necessary for our lives. I am fond of immersing in the music.

grassdoll

我不是NN，刚考完趁着热乎劲帮你看看。写的挺好的，所以就鸡蛋里面挑骨头了：

1. goals-->intention如何

2. However, a portable...这一句，
LZ的意思我明白，但however好像没有连接起一个强转折关系，毕竟however前说的是太忙，后说的是mp3。建议两个修改方案。一是把however改乘fortunately，让这种过渡更自然。二是改成However，this problem can be solved by a portable music player...（后面可以接着用从句，或者就此了结，因为portable本身就涵盖了take along的意思）。

其他的就木有了，比我一个月前写的好多了，用词结构都比较规范和到位，我自己也学习了很多东西。最后一个小小建议：下次发文的时候附个题目吧。

加油＋好运！

idealing

坦白说，我改了两段，可是突然断网，没了，就简单评一下算了。

1  用词。不要拘泥于用好词，难词。要用自己熟悉的词。单复数，时态一定要注意。不要用过多的the。

2 逻辑。第二段的逻辑不够好。可以简单说成：音乐可以反映一个时代的特征。然后两个例子。后面那个“让你熟悉乐器”的论述最好放在最后一段里。

3 句式。坦白说，有点生硬。反正我个人觉得生搬硬套不是好办法，对于一些自己不熟悉的句子最好不要用。

quanweiwei

真的是谢谢楼上两个NN啦,,,FIGHTING  ing.....

shiguang

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