刚开始练作文，忘各位大哥过目，我才初四。

xiayijcc

    
    

当然练的是第一篇了，哈哈哈哈。写了一个小时呢。

Attend college or university

    

Why the people attend universities
or colleges after they graduate from high schools?  This haunting question is unsolved when
I was in a junior school. When my older brother, a graduate student with many
friends, works a decent job and gets high salary every mouth, I get the answer
definitely. In my opinion, attending college or university benefits to increase
knowledge, prepare oneself to go to society, and have more opportunities to
have a good job.

    

 

    

First of all, to attend college or university,
students’ main job is to taste knowledge and lecture which largely determine
their jobs in the future. From kindergarten to senior school, what students
have learned is preparation of attending universities
or colleges and devoid of special knowledge, also, owning the
special is more possible to be employed. According to this, increasing special
knowledge so crucial that almost graduated students from senior schools harbor
the universities or colleges, the paradise
of knowledge. Moreover, the profound atmosphere of academic impacts every student’s spirit and
soul. More knowledge, except for special knowledge, may be touch by students in
universities or colleges. For example,
they can attend the lecture—How to cultivate the quality of great man.

    

 

    

Moreover, in a sense, the university or
college is a society of minisize, thus it is a good place for students to prepare
themselves to go to society. For instance, students may accumulate experience
of solve problems and improve interpersonal ability; They may consult some
valuable questions such as the difficulty of some Marjory they will meet in the
future with professors and graduated scholars; They may get part-time job of
his Marjory for being familiar with their work. After that, the step of walking
to society is never seemed awkward and embarrassed and never cruel slaughterhouse
is society in students’ deep eyes.

    

 

    

Finally, after students graduated, they may
have more opportunities to have a good job. The importance
of diploma of universities or colleges is
more and more significant by the development of society. Owning the diploma of universities or colleges is a one of judgements used to
evaluate the new blood of society whether they can take this job properly. As a survey, the students of university or college get jobs more
easily than those of senior school or junior school; the salaries the former
get is higher than those the later get.

    

 

    

By and large, before students go to universities
or colleges, they are fragile and ‘naked’; after they go to universities or
colleges, they have the weapons of knowledge and carry the armatures of sophisticated,
struggling in the campus. Once they plunge into the sea of complex society,
they will embrace the big fish, abundant salaries, easily and happily.

    

 

    

 谢谢。

    

xiayijcc

不会吧，怎么现在的前辈都那么不照顾后生。

rattledrum

When my older brother, a graduate student with many friends（这句话好像有点奇怪啊，干嘛还加一个with many friends,感觉有点突兀哦）, works a decent job （finds/gets a decent job会比较好啦)and gets high salary every mouth（不需要说every month了，而且也拼错了，拼成mouth了）

如果是我，我这样写（按照你的模板写这句话）：

my elder brother finds a decent and well paid job after he graduated from univsersity, which shows me a good example that high education not only can broaden people's knowledge, but also is very helpful for the start of a career.

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只是路过这里，说一点点看法，说得不好不要介意哦。

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