修改后的ISSUE36, 请版主审阅。请提意见，谢谢了

rae_hu

版主：我没有大量按照模版写，不知这样好不好。我只是怕重复而掉分。另外，我写完后感觉有点跑题了，能不能帮我看看。麻烦了！

36. “Businesses and other organizations have overemphasized the importance of working as a team. Clearly, in any human group, it is the strong individual, the person with the most commitment and energy, who gets things done.”

Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the opinion stated above. Support your views with reasons and/or examples from your own experience, observations, or reading.

The argument above complains that business and other organizations have3 overemphasized the importance of working as a tem and supports that strong individual, the person with the most commitment and energy, gets thins done.  I think this argument is talking about individualism and collectivism which is a complex and controversial issue that has been discussed over a long time.  Different people hold different opinions and there is no definite answer to it.  I disagree that the individual is the core reason for a group’s success and I think the argument is overemphasizing the strength of individual by putting forward that team work has been overemphasized.   

 

First, Individualism and collectivism are two contrasting views about the relationship between individual and group.  Individualism holds that the individual is the unit of achievement.  While not denying that one person can build on the achievements of others, individualism points out that achievement go beyond what has already been done; it is something new that is created by the individual.  But, we should be aware that individual is a part of a group and its achievement is a product of the whole group.  The individual is just a temporary spokesman for the underlying, collective process of progress.  Mr. Tachi Kiuchi, Managing Director of Mitsubishi Electric Corporation, addressed a keynote to the World Future Society on July 19, 1997, saying that “Today, as we grow different, we learn that none of us is whole. We need each other to fill in our gaps.”  Obviously, by connecting each other as a whole will work positively on the group’s long-term success.

 

Furthermore, the team work needs to be emphasized because the group is not simply putting the individuals together but combine them to form an organic integrity.   The team effectiveness is the combination of diversity of skills and personalities.  People use their strengths in full but can compensate for each other’s weakness and different personality types balance and complement each other.  A team can accomplish something bigger than one individual can because all the team efforts are oriented toward a clear goal, the team’s goal.  This relies heavily on good communications of every division within the team and harmony in member relationship.

 

In sum, a company’s success can rarely happen without focused team building efforts and activities.  If we strength the power of individual, there will too much spaces for problems.  For example, people will tend to fight for more authorities and dominance within the company.  Even if there are goals, there may be no commitment to achieve the goals.  Therefore, to undermine the team work but to strength individual will bring harm to the company not success.

rae_hu

又写了一篇ISSUE68，麻烦版主一并看一下。这篇我感觉没上篇好，烦请版主指点。谢谢了

68. “Since the physical work environment affects employee productivity and morale, the employees themselves should have the right to decide how their workplace is designed.”

Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the opinion stated above. Support your views with reasons and/or examples from your own experience, observations, or reading.

 

Nowadays, with the rapid economy development, the office buildings spring up like mushrooms in the major commercial cities all over the world.  White collars spend most of the day, at least eight hours, within the office and most of them seldom have time to walk out for the fresh air because of heavy work load.  Simultaneously, some illness associated with the physical work environment appears and thus the issue that the physical work environment affects employee productivity and morale has been brought up.  Some people suggest that the employees themselves should have the right to decide how their workplace is designed.  I agree with this opinion.

 

First, the physical environment in the work place has a direct relationship on the health and safety of employees. The hazards such as air-pollution, noise, radiation, and extremes in temperature and pressure will cause disease and thus decrease employee’s productivity.  Many firms, such as Allied Signal, now identify workplace safety as one of their main goals.  Some studies show that the symptoms of unexplained ill effects such as nausea, vomiting, headaches, coughing, shortness of breath, or fainting spells are issues with air quality and/or exposure to harmful chemicals.  These chemicals are always pollutant released from printers or copy machines.  Because of bad ventilation in the office building, these chemicals are not easily eliminated from indoor.  Therefore, I think the better solution to solve the problem is to keep those machines away from employees.  If the employees have right to design the office, they will choose the right places for these machines and make themselves a healthy work place and thus make their work performance more efficiently.

 

Furthermore, some workplace design may inconvenience for employees.  Through my observation, when people work, they don’t want to be disturbed by nearby colleagues.  If the work stations are too close, they will be annoyed by each other, sometime even other’s personal calls, and this will probably harm the harmony between individuals.  If the employees are allowed to make some design, such as make some distance with other’s work station and put some cabinets between them, it will not only keep a quiet and comfortable work environment for them own but also will make convenience use of the cabinet for files. 

 

In addition, by giving employees authority to design the company, it will make them feel even closer to the company.  It’s not only a place where they work but also a place where they design, like home.  These will strength their feelings of membership and builds up a tight relationship between the company and themselves.

 

Consequently, I advocate that employees should have right to decide how their work places to be designed.  Due to the above-mentioned reasons, which sometimes intervene to form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive, we may safely arrive at the conclusion I support.

rae_hu

顶，版主好像很忙啊

rio

以下是引用rae_hu在2007-9-9 18:38:00的发言：

版主：我没有大量按照模版写，不知这样好不好。我只是怕重复而掉分。另外，我写完后感觉有点跑题了，能不能帮我看看。麻烦了！

36. “Businesses and other organizations have overemphasized the importance of working as a team. Clearly, in any human group, it is the strong individual, the person with the most commitment and energy, who gets things done.”

Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the opinion stated above. Support your views with reasons and/or examples from your own experience, observations, or reading.

The argument above complains that business and other organizations have overemphasized the importance of working as a tem and supports that strong individual, the person with the most commitment and energy, gets thins done.  I think this argument is talking about individualism and collectivism which is a complex and controversial issue that has been discussed over a long time.  Different people hold different opinions and there is no definite answer to it.  I disagree that the individual is the core reason for a group’s success and I think the argument is overemphasizing the strength of individual by putting forward that team work has been overemphasized.   

其实你很多句子还是很模式化的比如第二和第三句.

其实你很多句子还是很模式化的比如第二和第三句.

First, Individualism and collectivism are two contrasting views about the relationship between individual and group.  Individualism holds that the individual is the unit of achievement.  While not denying that one person can build on the achievements of others, individualism points out that achievement go beyond what has already been done; it is something new that is created by the individual.  But, we should be aware that individual is a part of a group and its achievement is a product of the whole group.  The individual is just a temporary spokesman for the underlying, collective process of progress.  Mr. Tachi Kiuchi, Managing Director of Mitsubishi Electric Corporation, addressed a keynote to the World Future Society on July 19, 1997, saying that “Today, as we grow different, we learn that none of us is whole. We need each other to fill in our gaps.”  Obviously, by connecting each other as a whole will work positively on the group’s long-term success.

Furthermore, the team work needs to be emphasized because the group is not simply putting the individuals together but combine them to form an organic integrity.   The team effectiveness is the combination of diversity of skills and personalities.  People use their strengths in full but can compensate for each other’s weakness and different personality types balance and complement each other.  A team can accomplish something bigger than one individual can because all the team efforts are oriented toward a clear goal, the team’s goal.  This relies heavily on good communications of every division within the team and harmony in member relationship.

这一段稍显单薄,可以说一下只有个人没有团队的后果是什么

这一段稍显单薄,可以说一下只有个人没有团队的后果是什么

In sum, a company’s success can rarely happen without focused team building efforts and activities.  If we strength the power of individual, there will too much spaces for problems.  For example, people will tend to fight for more authorities and dominance within the company.  Even if there are goals, there may be no commitment to achieve the goals.  Therefore, to undermine the team work but to strength individual will bring harm to the company not success.

我认为你这样写很好,因为你从宽泛的话题中提取了自己的看法.而且你的例子也不错.

我提倡自由的写作

rio

以下是引用rae_hu在2007-9-9 22:55:00的发言：

又写了一篇ISSUE68，麻烦版主一并看一下。这篇我感觉没上篇好，烦请版主指点。谢谢了

68. “Since the physical work environment affects employee productivity and morale, the employees themselves should have the right to decide how their workplace is designed.”

Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the opinion stated above. Support your views with reasons and/or examples from your own experience, observations, or reading.

Nowadays, with the rapid economy development, the office buildings spring up like mushrooms in the major commercial cities all over the world.  White collars spend most of the day, at least eight hours, within(in) the office and most of them seldom have time to walk out for the fresh air because of heavy work load.  Simultaneously, some illness associated with the physical work environment appears and thus the issue that the physical work environment affects employee productivity and morale has been brought up.  Some people suggest that the employees themselves should have the right to decide how their workplace is designed.  I agree with this opinion.

First, the physical environment in the work place has a direct relationship on the health and safety of employees. The hazards such as air-pollution, noise, radiation, and extremes in temperature and pressure will cause disease (to unfold in the room) and thus decrease employee’s productivity.  Many firms, such as Allied Signal, now identify workplace safety as one of their main goals.  Some studies show that the symptoms of unexplained ill effects such as nausea, vomiting, headaches, coughing, shortness of breath, or fainting spells are issues with air quality and/or exposure to harmful chemicals.  These chemicals are always pollutant released from printers or copy machines.  Because of bad ventilation in the office building, these chemicals are not easily eliminated from indoor.  Therefore, I think the better solution to solve the problem is to keep those machines away from employees.  If the employees have right to design the office, they will choose the right places for these machines and make themselves a healthy work place and thus make their work performance more efficiently.

写得不错，其中具体的举例很好

写得不错，其中具体的举例很好

Furthermore, some workplace design may inconvenience for employees.  Through my observation, when people work, they don’t want to be disturbed by nearby colleagues.  If the work stations are too close, they will be annoyed by each other, sometime even other’s personal calls, and this will probably harm the harmony between individuals.  If the employees are allowed to make some design, such as make some distance with other’s work station and put some cabinets between them, it will not only keep a quiet and comfortable work environment for them own but also will make convenience use of the cabinet for files. 

这一段差点跑题，不过你最后又回来了

这一段差点跑题，不过你最后又回来了

In addition, by giving employees authority to design the company, it will make them feel even closer to the company.  It’s not only a place where they work but also a place where they design, like home.  These will strength their feelings of membership and builds up a tight relationship between the company and themselves.

稍显单薄，最好能加强一些论证

稍显单薄，最好能加强一些论证

Consequently, I advocate that employees should have right to decide how their work places to be designed.  Due to the above-mentioned reasons, which sometimes intervene to form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive, we may safely arrive at the conclusion I support.

rae_hu

谢谢版主