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TWE26 第一次写作文 求大家拍砖

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发表于 2007-8-27 22:45:00 | 只看该作者

TWE26 第一次写作文 求大家拍砖


    

自己感觉干巴巴的...没什么说服力 郁悶


Today, movie is one of the most popular
entertainments in our life. More and more people become movie fans. There is a
public discussion today about the construction of a new movie theater in my
neighborhood. Those who object to the plan argue that the building process
would lead to noise and dangerous which could affect people’s life. But people
who advocate this plan, on the other hand, claim that the new movie theatre
could bring convenience and promote economics development. As far as I am
concerned, I agree with the latter.


    

First of all, people can appreciate the
newest movies and obtain more topics of communication in theatre. When I was
young, I have no chance to watch movies and I really envied people who talk
about new movie such as The Shawshank Redemption. Today people in our community
and near our community can enjoy the exciting or funny show in the new theater,
they also can approach the popular culture, and towards participation in the
larger world. Is this not a excellent affair?


    

Also, the movie theater could attract a
large amount of customers, and accordingly need to employ a large number of
people as ticket sellers, staffs, and so on. People who are going to the movies
or going out of the theater may need foods, beverages such as coffee and beer,
and so on. They may build cafes, bars, restaurants, and other entertainment
places. This is a perfect market, so every people could capitalize on the
opportunity to earn proficient and develop economy around the movie theater.


    

In conclusion, I think although a new movie
theater may do some harm to people’s life to some degree, most impacts exerted
by the theater are desirable and beneficial. We should take measures to provide
safety and suitable of people in our community and prevent all kinds of accident
during the building process so that we can enjoy more conveniences in leisure
time brought by the new theater.


沙发
发表于 2007-8-28 22:11:00 | 只看该作者

你可以先参考该版置顶的帖子里边的修改集合

然后我在iBT区有一个写作的帖子,你也可以参考一下

然后发现自己的一些问题,进行修改过后再发上来

我进行具体的修改

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