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In our country, more and more students have the options to attend collage rather than to go to work. There are many reasons included in this phenomenon. I believe that the three most common reasons are to be more competitive in getting a decent job, to get a more mature stage in their individual development and to fulfill the integrality of education.

First and foremost, it is universally acknowledged that today to get a decent job need more knowledge than in the past. High school education just gives us general knowledge. But the vast majority of jobs need much more special knowledge. It is hard to image that a person with high school degree can get a job in a high-tech company. And collage education gives this special knowledge just we need.

Further more, there is on denying that attending collage can get more knowledge, but what's more people can get a more mature ways of think. Usually, collage is far from our home. And we must learn to be independent without the help of parents and how communicate with other people, such as classmate, professor, academic adviser and so on. In conclusion, collage is the best place to make us be more mature.

Last but not least, admittedly, in collage a system education of special knowledge is available. Many people believe that it is not a integrated education, even not a integrated life, without collage education. Collage education gives us not only special knowledge for future career, but also knowledge in humanities. Take some subjects such as history and literature for example, they all promote our all-around development. So many people attend collage to fulfill their integrated education and life.

Therefore, if you want to get a decent job in this competitive society, if you want to be more mature, if you want to fulfill your education integrality, attending college undoubted is a inevitable avenue.

 

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