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帮我看下行文思路、句型和词汇方面还有什么要改进的，先谢过了~~~~~~~~~~~ 题目是145 Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we really do not need. Others say that advertising tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? 正文 Curiosity about things derives from unknowing what they are and how they come up, which sometimes lead us to a falsehood, something not truly existing in the world. The attitude of most people toward advertising is such a situation. They think that advertising tells them about new producers that would improve their lives. Actually that is not true, advertising just encourages us to buy things we do not need. My reasons are following. For one thing, advertising introduce us something unusable to us, such as luxury furniture, big apartments, some of the electron productions and so on. Advertising exaggerate their function and beautify them to convince people that such things are just people need through media. Those things in fact are not compulsory, that is, it is not essential in our lives. Our lives won't be affected without them, however, if we do want to possess these things, they would strengthen our life burden and even make some people live unhappy for having no sufficient money to pay for them. Rich people buy them just for distinguishing themselves from others rather than for the products' function. But for the majority of people, it is not wise for them to purchase such things. In my opinion, things that are useful to us do not need advertising at all since we look for them by ourselves. For another thing, some advertising give us false information, some of which even are harmful to us. It is typically in the field of health food that the producers or merchant would lie. They tell us that the products evolve some nutrients of bioactivity like peptides or proteins that are good for body. But these things evolved will not work because the moment when they enter our stomach they would be broken down to amino acids which are present in most animal food or vegetables. Situations will be worse if those substances interact to each other and then generate new toxic substances. Finally, even though some advertising things are functional, they are also not needed because there are still many other alternatives, with high quality and low price. All of those reasons are exactly why I think advertising encourages us to buy things we do not need. | 
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发表于 2007-7-10 21:46:00
